DEFT3K 4: A New Begining, ch 1-3

[deft3k]

Story or Series Title: A New Begining
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Posted Grade: Crucio crucio crucio crucio sectumsempra avada kedavra!, by Bellatrix

Comments:

Bellatrix: They had the master kissing Potter And touching him!
Lucius: It's like a colony of commas have been forced to live as abused mine slaves.
Peter: The Dark Lord is made of

Comments

[phorcys]

A/N: PHEW! I finished rewriting this chap! Sorry if there are spelling errors,

They had rewriten this, meaning presumably that the first version was worse. That is hard to believe.

[morriganscrow]

...the sparks emanating from the cauldron were extingwished.
I love this line!

They broke apart but Tom obviously had other things in mind: like Harry's beautiful neck line.
Lucius: "Who is your tailor, boy?"
He had Harry under his mercy after the first two kisses and nips on his neck.
Tom: I thought, perhaps, since I had him tied to a headstone.
Gorgeous snark!

Horrid fic, excellent sporking.

[kitsune_no_mae]

Tin man made me wonder if it's a troll but I think it's just an idiot after having finished the thing.

Oh and I don't mean to nitpick Lucius of all people but a color can be considered cool so I imagine that's what the suethor meant. Anyway, nice sporking as per usual.

[deft3k]

I think the Suethor meant that Tom had the coldest eyes Harry had ever seen. We have no frame of reference for Tom's eye color, so far as I know. Lucius is definitely nitpicking here, as colors *can* be cool but are rarely cold.

[ardys_the_ghoul]

What's with all the euphemisms? Member? Cock? Oaken mast? It's a penis! Call it what it is! >X^(

[deft3k]

Note that Tom does. ;)

[ardys_the_ghoul]

Ah, yes. I guess I was speaking more to the writers of bad fanfic/bad porn, since they seem to have a mortal fear of using the word "penis," but nevertheless, thank you, Mr. Riddle, for being refreshingly direct. :)

[the_failed_poet]

I love you so, so much. This MST made me sporfle so much while I was supposed to be reading about Native Americans! ^__^

and two when he was also touching him THERE!
Peter: Harry has a very sensitive right elbow.

Much much love.

Good job!