one-shot

[creatngnewscars]

Title: I've Paid For Your Mistakes
Fandom: Papa Roach/Atreyu
Pairing: Jacoby Shaddix/Alex Varkatzas
Word Count: 3823
POV: Third
Rating: NC-17
Summary: After a terrible fight with the wife at home, Coby ends up at the Muy Thai Kick Boxing Gym hoping to curb his anger and relieve some stress but when curiosity gets the best of him, he ends up with

Comments

[gatesofshadows]

FC! XD

*bounds off to read*

[gatesofshadows]

fsabfdbgd... Wow. just wow. brain has gone to goo n_n

*memmoriiiieees* XD

[creatngnewscars]

im going to assume that is a good thing lolol.

i was so nervous to post this so this totally made my night. Thank you! xD

[gatesofshadows]

yesssss! n_n

[samp_16]

He knew he had seen the blonde man before and knew him from somewhere but the words burned on the tip of his tongue and he bit at it to stop any more tingles before he made an ass of himself. when you assume, you make an ass out of u and me.. haha

The dark haired man could smell the masculinity from the other, sweet and pungent all at once and made him want to lick Alex from the sharp curve of his jaw bone to the dark trail leading into his pants down from his belly button. oh my god, who doesn't want to? *drools*

I think you have a few run-on sentences somewhere in here.
like this, Alex hissed and the older one could feel the others blunt nails digging and raking into the skin of his shoulders causing such a mixture of pain and pleasure he did what the other asked and threw his weight up into the blonde pulling a cry out of him and knew he found his target. like.. I'm thinking there could be one or two commas in there, or maybe it could be split into two sentences to avoid confusion

[creatngnewscars]

lol i use that saying all the time. got it from a book but hell if i remember which one xD

and yessss. i had way too much fun making alex all godly like especially when he was working out. i really should tame my own fantasies oO

and thank you. i should go fix it. it was seriously like 4 a.m but my muse wouldn't leave me alone!

as for eye color ive seen Coby with green eyes more then anything and i have a pic somewhere where Alex's are startling blue. each their own though :)

thank you!

[hellview13]

ugh i looooooove it!

[creatngnewscars]

thank you!!

[xxrevenge666xx]

Oh God...
Well, that was pretty much the hottest thing I've read today xD
Alex is too damn hot in this when he's working out -nods-
I'm totally saving this to my memories!

[creatngnewscars]

lol tha nk you! this made me smile
and pfft there is no such thing as too hot. How can anybody NOT write about that man like that. he deserves the credit he gets xD

[soulmates_never]

Hahaha, you know I'm going to say the same thing that I probably always say when I read your stuff, namely that Coby has blue eyes, 100% no doubt about it blue eyes! But I know you have still not been swayed on that, so fair enough, you're entitled to your opinion, but eek, also have to tell you that Alex has brown eyes haha! They looked vaguely green on a recent pic I saw of him, but I would say they generally look brown.

Anyway, on with the story. I'm glad someone else has considered this pairing because I'm about to do it shortly myself and it was nice to see Alex's love of the sport get utilised since he laid himself wide open to being slashed with that quote about 'rolling on mats' ;-)

Very nicely written and obviously this could take a sequel *wink*

[creatngnewscars]

well i think this is the first review ive gotten from you to say that but i'll take your word for it ;) but mod or not there are some things i can defy you on ;) His eyes always look more green to me then blue