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ceslas

Aftermath, Part Four

Jan 27, 2007 20:32

Series: Finding
Title: Aftermath, Part Four
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: Post-BDM
Characters: Jayne/River
Disclaimer: Firefly owns me, I own words
Notes: Organizational Post for Aftermath: follows directly after stand-down order at Mr. Universe's moon. Fills in between the pieces of the Five Times memes... Mal kept bugging Jayne for what happened...

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finding, jayne, river, aftermath

Comments 29

anonymous January 28 2007, 02:53:16 UTC

I love your writing and get excited to see an update- that's all, I don't have anything really constructive to say, lol- princat.

ceslas January 28 2007, 02:57:28 UTC

Well, I am glad you liked it then >;0)

Seriously, I really am glad, you are a constant reader and that matters alot to me, that those who follow this story actually like it! Thank you!

momin8r January 28 2007, 04:44:27 UTC

oh i'm so glad for the update! this was wonderful and you left a bit of a cliffhanger. must have more!! i'm surprised i'm actually commenting. i've been hiding for a bit. i have so many stories i've read that i need to comment on. (bad reader) i can't wait for more. i always love to read what you write. take care :D

ceslas January 28 2007, 04:50:10 UTC

*Tehe, got you to pop out of lurk mode!*

I try to be good about commenting myself, but, alas, not always *Dramatic arm before eyes*

Thank you so much for the compliment! I will try to wring out more as soon as I can... he is stubborn you know >;0)

sevangel January 28 2007, 06:38:16 UTC

I'm really liking this. I like 'boss' Jayne. I like that he's so damn stubborn (much like our captain) and won't sit back and heal. This looks to be very interesting.

ceslas January 30 2007, 01:29:02 UTC

I think the need to step up to the plate and be 'on task' makes these people really shine. I think that is true of the whole crew actually. Jayne wouldn't do what he is doing now if someone else was doing it. And I believe he has definitely grown since The Train Job where having him in any position of power at all was a mistake. I watched the series and the film and saw development of responsibility in Jayne. He realized his place on Serenity was one that required more than just being a dumb brute. And of course, serious s*(t happened after Miranda that made him change a whole lot more >;0)

Jayne's a force of nature. alexis_laforge January 28 2007, 06:38:24 UTC

But, then again, so's River. I must say you've made me so excited for the next part! This Mr. Cairo character seems like an unabashedly bad hombre, but, well, J+R=destruction on levels unheard of since the Visigoths got past Rome's offensive line. Okay, terrible joke. In any event, good on you, and I'm excited for the next part.

Re: Jayne's a force of nature. ceslas January 30 2007, 01:35:59 UTC

I like that characterization of him/them (Force of Nature) And J+R=Destruction, hell yeah! Especially when they work together with a communication that has dawned on neither one (Gotta love some of the mysteries given us by the Academy >;0) )

Love the Visigoths breaking the Roman's offensive line joke! Course, I had to stop myself from weeping just a little bit since the Patriots just got their asses whupped by the Colts in just that fashion...Sigh.

Glad you are looking forward to the next ssection...*Gotta go write it, gotta go write it*

As a former offensive lineman... alexis_laforge January 30 2007, 04:28:17 UTC

and as a current fan of history, the joke just seemed appropriate. Also was a nose-guard. Much more fun.

I can't wait for the next installment. These are real gems.

Re: As a former offensive lineman... ceslas January 30 2007, 05:10:50 UTC

I love these little snippets of life you insert in your comments. They make me smile and chuckle as I try to create a three dimensional image of you... which is funny in that that is exactly what is this story is doing with River and Jayne.

So, indeed, Visigoths, full charge!

Thread 12

bookaddict43 January 29 2007, 11:51:02 UTC

Mr Cairo sounds like a real bad ass and I'm worried for our two.

The glimpse into Jayne's backstory here is very interesting and I like that the crew are finally seeing him. I love the last section with River and Jayne arguing and the final lines were wonderful!

More please? *bats eyelids*

ceslas January 30 2007, 01:41:37 UTC

*She batted her eyes at us tehe* *Swirling happily*

Mr. Cairo is not a nice man. More I will not say. No matter how much you beg. But, as Alexis noted, J+R=Force of nature.

Indeed loving the revealing of Jayne as he himself finds things out he may not want to about himself. (Is that as convoluted sounding as I think it is?)

Last lines just came that way, saw them clearly in the cargo bay, moving in each other's space, feeling out the limits. Very interesting, teeny, tiny moment.