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casi_casi

counterpoint; chapter four.

May 15, 2011 09:41

Title: Counterpoint
Chapter: 4 of 4
Characters: David Silva / David Villa; Sergio Ramos / Fernando Torres; Steven Gerrard / Xabi Alonso
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Lies.
Notes: AU. Sorry about the delay; this past week was finals week.
Feedback > life. Constructive criticism is always welcome.

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( and you see behind every face the mental emptiness deepen leaving only the growing terror of nothing to think about )

david silva, counterpoint, sernando, stevie/xabi, xabi alonso, steven gerrard, fic, davidavid, sergio ramos, fernando torres, david villa

Comments 25

brontok May 18 2011, 15:14:56 UTC

good god, such beautiful writing! although things never did actually end well, that's just what happens in real life, doesn't it? everything about this fic, the circumstances, the personalities, the conversations, etc. etc., they all seem so real. and I'm so impressed you wrote 3 pairings in one series, and each and every one of their segments are lovely on their own as well.

casi_casi May 21 2011, 07:55:19 UTC

Oh, thank you so much! That's really everything I could have hoped to hear, and I'm so, so grateful that you thought the story was realistic. This, especially, has made my day:
each and every one of their segments are lovely on their own as well
Many, many thanks.

elisa88 May 26 2011, 02:19:16 UTC

*huge girly squee*
This was lovely. I truly enjoyed reading this story, and the bickering between the dahveeds was great.

I loved it. ♥

casi_casi May 28 2011, 02:04:32 UTC

Ohhh, thank you so much, I'm so glad to hear it! I very much appreciate your reading this from start to finish. ♥

snuzzie June 5 2011, 08:14:15 UTC

SO I'm reading this about a trillion years late bc ahhh school and life and etc. ANYWAY. UMMMMMMM this was phenomenal. Like. WOW.

It was superbly written and the way you made every single line intersect, like one of those movies, like Crash, and how it played out like those movies, it worked PERFECTLY and seriously I'm in awe of that because that's HELLA hard to do.

UMMMMMMM Stevie and Xabi were so sad but gorgeous, like the ending to them was absolutely wonderful.

YOU MADE ME FALL IN LOVE WITH VILLA/SILVA I have never, in my life, cared a bit about them but you seriously made me L O V E them here and the ending ahhhhhhhh. The banter with Xabi and Sergio and then Sergio and Villa and then Villa and his dad and then omg the dialogue with Villa and Silva at the end. ALL OF THOSE WERE PERFECT and hilarious and wonderful like, seriously. I basically just adored your Sergio and your dialogue was wonderful. Ahhhhhh.

Um but I'm never forgiving you for the Sernando bye.

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casi_casi December 2 2011, 03:22:51 UTC

Oh. My god. This is such a late reply. I'm so sorry! I'm hopeless.

But thank you so much! It's lovely that you read this so long after it was written. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. ♥