follow the breathings of his heart- Drabble/one shot, RUKI/KAI

[buriedinheart]

 
Title: Follow the breathings of his heart
Chapter: Drabble/oneshot
Author: Buriedinheart
Genre: Romance, fluff?
Warnings: none
Disclaimer: I own no one.
Rating: g
Pairing: Ruki X Kai
Bands: the GazettE
Synopsis: Studying and emotions don't go well together
Comments: My lit exam's tomorrow but i have really lost all motivation to study, i thought that

Comments

[kampf_baka]

aww how sweet

[buriedinheart]

:)

Rather impressed.

[icchatta_ne]

Ruki laughs and it sounds exactly like stardust would, sprinkling all over the tiny, dusty apartment that is claustrophobic and small and stifling and not big enough for their hopes and dreams. ... a brilliant start, it's been a while since I've read one.

Kai smiles, coyly, silently as his heart yearns to touch the boy sitting beside him, the boy with the crinkled eyes and the cute laugh and the soft fingers ghosting the pages of his math textbook. This is what paragraph 3? and already the strings in my chest are playing a wonderful melody, so descriptively cute.

'X+ Y = cigarettes X coffee = you and i studying hopelessly ... creativity, is always SO appreciated.

Ruki stops laughing then, the laughter dying off, trailing off like a comet would across the darkest night sky, leaving silence to settle in oppressively once more. He yawns then, fingers clutching a cigarette, the flame disappearing for a moment as the stick lights up. this part made it ever so vivid how this are high school students you are talking about. Normally when

Re: Rather impressed.

[buriedinheart]

Ohmygod you are a critic! lovely ! haha that's a proper change from all the other comments i usually get, like 'i love this' (although they are really great and they make me so happy as well) and i appreciate you giving me such positive feedback on my writing, you even broke it down! you're rather amazing, thanks for taking time to write this entire comment. im a miss, ahaa :) i was quite surprised when i read your comment. thank you! i will be updating this journal with my written fics ( i have them written already, just going through some self editing) so do keep a look out out for them! i appreciate negative and constructive criticism as well, and your comment was just.. lovely :) thanks again.

Re: Rather impressed.

[icchatta_ne]

Hahahah you are so cute miss lol.
I am just a wannabe writer myself, and I guess a beginner critique, but I can put subject, verb, and complement object (if needed) in the right order, so I thought it nice to start leaving "constructive criticism" (^ ^" )

Yup, well said, every comment is important either it be ":D" or something more detailed like mine, a good author can realize that *thumbs up to you for that*.

Keep it up ne? See you around~

Re: Rather impressed.

[buriedinheart]

yeah of course thats for sure :) thanks for making your presence known! ^^