Fic: Quiet Rain (1/1)
Title: Quiet Rain (1/1)
Author: BradyGirl
Pairings/Characters: Oliver Queen, Dinah Drake Lance
Category: Drama
Rating: G
Warnings: None
Spoilers: None
Summary: Ollie comforts the newly-widowed Dinah Drake Lance.
Date Of Completion: August 7, 2007
Date Of Posting: August 7, 2007
Disclaimer: I don’t own ‘em, DC does, more’s the pity.
Word Count: 637
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Author: BradyGirl
Pairings/Characters: Oliver Queen, Dinah Drake Lance
Category: Drama
Rating: G
Warnings: None
Spoilers: None
Summary: Ollie comforts the newly-widowed Dinah Drake Lance.
Date Of Completion: August 7, 2007
Date Of Posting: August 7, 2007
Disclaimer: I don’t own ‘em, DC does, more’s the pity.
Word Count: 637
( Read more... )
Comments 7
You should write them more often.
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You should write them more often.
Thank you, Green Eyes! :)
Hmm, there's quite a bit of Ollie in the new arc of Rainbow's Freedom, and I intend to write more Dinah in the third arc.
But of course I might do shorter fics in between! :)
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Her dark hair was stylishly-upswept, her navy-blue, two-piece suit smartly-tailored, a light-blue pillbox hat and gloves on the endtable next to the couch.
You captured such a visual image here for me. The right colors, the right style, the perfect picture of a woman from that era in grief.
“So, the mustache is fake?”
Ollie instinctively touched it. “Yeah. Though who knows? Maybe I’ll grow a real one in addition to a beard.”
More perfection, given the dislike of facial hair through much of the twentieth century, something that still shows in military and commercial guidelines.
“I feel like I’m at a crossroads ( ... )
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This is wonderfully-detailed feedback. Thank you, blackrosebard!
You captured such a visual image here for me. The right colors, the right style, the perfect picture of a woman from that era in grief.
I'm glad I was able to capture it! It was such a different time as to what women wore when they left the house.
More perfection, given the dislike of facial hair through much of the twentieth century, something that still shows in military and commercial guidelines.
Yes, one of the biggest things during that era was hair: facial and length of it on the head!
Perfect. There is so little to do with a grieving, loving spouse. All the words, all the hallmark platitudes...I just love how Ollie knew nothing he could say would truly be of a comfort to her.
They say 'write what you know' which is one reason I do tend to dwell on angst. But you took this moment and made it something more, a sad piece, but one that clearly shows a move toward a transitory state for them both.*nods* I ( ... )
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Thank you, Pervy! :)
Yes, I wanted to give some hope there at the end. Glad it worked!
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There was no one quite like Black Canary on Earth-One.
A beautifully simple and resonant line that reveals so much about how Ollie's already feeling. Really nice!
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Yes! :) There's definitely more to him than just brashness and political rantings. Dinah has glimpsed into what's there and likes it. Also, she's a new widow here and Ollie is deliberately dampening down his more flamboyant personality elements, and also remembers his own grief over his parents and how people feel at times like this. I drew on experiences of my own for this.
The playing with hair color was a nice touch as well. :) And the image of Ollie in a tweed jacket with leather elbows cracked me up!
I thought to myself, well, if we have exact doubles of people, how can that be explained at a funeral when they're coming as their civilian selves and not their superhero personas? So disguises had to be it! :)
I like that image, too! :)
There was no one quite like Black Canary on Earth-One ( ... )
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