[fic] can you come down with us

[bluewalk]

Title: can you come down with us
Rating: G
Characters/Pairings: Luffy/Nami (maybe?)
Word Count: 1815
Notes: Birthday fic for weissofthecorax. Set pre-Sabaody because I like skirting the edges of doom.

Comments

[amelia_seyroon]

:)

[bluewalk]

:))))

[aevium]

Oh my god you've done it again. This is so sweet. I am a fan of LuNa, especially when it's as subtle and underlying and "floaty" as this. You always manage to pull off that kind of feel so seamlessly. Really incredible work with Luffy's character too, and that says a lot and you know it, don't you?

That part where he stops listening to Nami and then bursts into "noise-making" mode (albeit sensible Captain noise-making mode) is probably my favourite, and what stood out to me the most. He tries to muffle her bitter-sadness with his noise. It's beautiful and so very Luffy. Koodos for this, you're always such a massive inspiration. <3 xoxo

[bluewalk]

YOU ARE MOST KIND. This is my first time writing from Luffy's POV and it was sobering, to say the least. I mentioned this in a reply in the other post, but I think Luffy's chosen a difficult and tiring way to love, but he does it relentlessly, he's always "happy" and thinking of that smashes my heart to bits :(

Thank you thank you thank you times a million <3

[zankoku_angel]

Wonderful fic! I love how you've portrayed Luffy here.

[bluewalk]

Thank you so much! This was my first fic from Luffy's POV so I am relieved that it worked for you :D

[printfogey]

What a wonderful Luffy POV fic. ♥ You've really put your finger on the most fundamental parts of his character, and expressed it so well and with so much emotion. (And I really like the distinction he makes between a Nami who is bitter and a Nami who feels sad.) Nami being upset at the thought of her and the rest in the crew being a burden for Luffy feels all too understandable even though it's a mistake. Luffy being afraid Nami will leave, too. Painful, but in a good way. (Mostly - I'm trying not to think about what's in store for Luffy in the future at this point. ;___;)

He stops listening, even though he can tell she has more to say. He flops onto his back and the blue sky slides over his eyes until it’s all he can see. He scowls at it, how empty and plain, boring, and he snaps back up, his spine straight as the mast. He focuses on the line of the horizon, the way it tilts as Sunny bobs on the currents, and his whole face feels tight and he hates it. He picks at the grass, focusing on the over-brimming sensation inside of him,

[bluewalk]

I feel like every time you show up, I am stricken with the urge to roll around on the floor and make incomprensible gurgling noises in your general direction in a pathetic attempt to express how happy you make me *gurgles*

Thank you so very much! I wasn't really sure what I was getting myself into, this being my first Luffy POV, and I mentioned in another reply that the only way I could write this was to plaster a fake grin on my face and imagine having to do that all the time, tirelessly and without fail, for the people you love, and that didn't give me the happiest feeling in the world, to say the least! At the same time, though, it was fun to write, because Luffy is fun despite everything he's gone through and will go through post-Sabaody (sob).

Thank you!!! You are much too kind to me <3<3<3<3

[chesuto]

Oh my gosh, hiiiii. I haven't read any of your fics in a while. But wow. Wow. This is amazing. ;___; I--I don't even know where to begin my review. T___T

I just--hmm. I still don't know where to start. LOL

There're so many things I can say, but all I can manage to concretize is this: You've got a way with words that tug on my heartstrings just right. ♥ What's vivid is vivid. What's vague (if there is) is satisfyingly vague enough, with enough concrete details for me to wrap my finger around its vagueness. Uhm, Idek what i'm saying really. Prolly just trying to be profound LOL Your words have that much of an effect on me, I guess? Like a floaty, happy, warm fuzzy feeling swelled up in my chest. :'D

Just to quote my fave part:
"It’s hard because you guys aren’t rubber like me!" he says, whines. “So you get hurt and you don’t bounce back as fast, and sometimes you get all quiet. And I don’t like that. I don’t like when you guys are hurt, or sad. You’re not supposed to be, ever. I hate it. I want to make it stop, but I can’t punch sad

[bluewalk]

Hello!!! It really has been a while! I haven't been too active on LJ recently.

You are as kind as always and I am still unworthy of your praise. Most of the time I feel like my writing is murky at best, but you are very generous to say it's "satisfyingly vague" XD Perhaps I should hire you as my public relations manager ♥♥ And the feelings of floaty, happy, warm fuzziness are completely reciprocated; your comments leave me floored.

Thank you for dropping by, and for the lovely words ♥

[chesuto]

It sure has been. :) I haven't been on LJ too much lately, either. I'm mostly on Tumblr or Twitter nowadays. lol I actually don't know what made me go back to this fic blog of yours out of the blue, but when the urge came, I immediately rushed towards your blog and started reading. Hahaha. XD

Oh my, I'd be honored to be your PR. ♥♥♥♥♥ XD I'm glad my comments make you feel that happy, too. ;w;

Oh, and thank you for adding me. I am so honored. ;w; ♥
I'll be adding you back, though my LJ doesn't have much content anymore. Hee. ♥