Fic: That Still Small Voice: Chapter Four

[lady_oneiros]

Why, yes. This chapter is awful. But I'm sick of fighting with it and wish to move on to the rest of the story. However, if any of you have any ideas on how to improve it, please let me know. If I can revise it to my satisfaction, I will repost it later. Also, much thanks to lawrencered for giving me some feedback on this chapter

Title: That Still Small

Comments

[artoni]

I love this fic so much it isn't even funny. The sheer creepiness. And good lord, it reminds me of Nine Inch Nail's The Becoming.

I eagerly await more. I don't care how long I have to wait.

[lady_oneiros]

Thank ya! XD I listened to the song....I may have to start playing it in the background while I write. ^_^ Chapter five maybe a little while in coming, but I'll try to not make everyone wait too long. Thanks for reading!

[lady_oneiros]

Wow...thank you so much! *humbled* But please don't let your neurons explode...not yet, anyway. Save that for what I have planned later in the story.

I'm glad you are picking up on the subtleties of Sam's devolution. Especially since I'm not sure of how it's going down myself. I guess we'll see. As for the scratching, that will also be revealed later on. I know. I'm cruel.

Thank you for reading, and I'm very glad you enjoyed it! *grin*

[sbx]

This whole story is fricken' awesome. And deliciously creepy, but I believe that's been said many times before.

I feel a little silly asking this but could you explain the cookbooks joke? It sounds vaguely familiar, but I can't quite place it...

And yay! Wheeljack! *is a happy clam* The likelihood of explosions in this fic just increased by 90%. XD

[lady_oneiros]

Thank you very much! *bows grandly

[antiquixotic]

*Rubs cheek against computer screen like a contented cat* Not to worry, chica! The creep-factor was not quite as pronounced here, but that in no way means it was any less wonderful. I loved the ponderings about rain and its prevalence in songs, and I really loved Bee's reluctance to let Sam out of the car, as well as his hesitancy when talking about love. It was such a simple scene, and yet it was packed with so much meaning. Brava

[antiquixotic]

*Grumbles* I forgot to comment on this bit. Transformers + 'To Serve Man' = Awesomeness!

[lady_oneiros]

*rubs behind the ears* Good kitty! I'm really glad that you liked it, despite the different pacing. I'm also really glad that you enjoyed the rain scene with Bumblebee and Sam--it was my favorite part of the chapter to write, and it was the one that was most clearly defined in my head.

I am an absolute sucker for paradoxes and word games. I get probably an unhealthy kick from them. As for Leather Man, he was intended to just be a one-time guy, but now you have gotten me to thinking about bringing him back. Hmm. We'll see if he wanders back in at some point.

I'm so happy that you're looking forward to the next chapter...just don't hurt yourself! ^_^ And I agree. Viva la Wheeljack!

Oh, and I can not tell you how much I squeed that someone got the "To Serve Man" joke. *grin*

[remy_ice_angel]

OOoohhh....maybe the Leather Man was a hallucination that Megatron produced in the kid? 8D

And it's good to take a break from true creepiness to a more relaxed state...that's how you build suspense after all. ;) Excellent chapter!

[badluck_cat]

Man this is getting better and better :D cant wait for the rest! Awesome writing!