Disappearance of Denmark Ch. 7

[aseies]

Title: Disappearance of Denmark
Author: ASEies (AmeUmi36@Deviantart)
Rating: T (there are slightly mature scenes in later chapters)
Characters: (main) Norway, Iceland, Finland, Sweden, Denmark, (secondary) OC!Greenland, England, Prussia
Couples: Denmark/Norway, Sweden/Finland, Hinted Greenland/Iceland, Hinted England/China
Warnings: Angst, OCs,

Comments

[scheeles_green]

Yaay! It's a shame Denmark's just going to want a one-night stand...

Loved the Scandinavia & the World reference, and the Danish accent. And I feel kind of bad for Prussia, if he really has all those false memories...

[aseies]

*gasp* You know him too well!

Haha thanks~ The bike thing was a last-minute add actually, but I had the potato accent as a detail since the beginning.

Huh. I never really thought about Prussia. /oh Norway's perspective. But that's a good point. Prussia really had to be everywhere back then, 'cause he was expanding by land AND sea if he had to cover Denmark's stuff too...

[sparklingtea]

I actually felt a bit sorry for Prussia in this chapter, he has all these memories that aren't actually his, and I know it's hard for Norway to stand him, but wahhhh. :c Poor Prussia. It's okay everything will be back to normal soon and you can go have dorky fun with Liechtenstein.

I feel like in the beginning that you had too much prose going on and I was getting a bit impatient. While the prose was interesting and fact-filled, some of the facts felt a bit...forced? And not like something that would come out naturally. While it's good, and in fact fascinating to have facts, I would have maybe portrayed them differently--maybe as short flashbacks? I would have loved to know what exactly Denmark said to Iceland about bikelanes and what kind of attitude Iceland was giving back. xD

[aseies]

You guys make me feel bad for not considering how Prussia felt at all. /shotI can understand that. I rewrote this at 3am after all-- it was less prosy before but the problem was there was a lot of telling not showing, so I was trying to show more than just say he was reminiscing and stuff

[amayara]

...oh, really? I was about to commend you for having Norway top for once. In general, I hate it when one character *always* tops or *always* bottoms, and in particular I really, really don't see Norway always taking it. Even more in particular, I think it makes more sense for him to be dominant/topping here. He's coming into this tryst with a lot more emotion than Denmark, and while (I'm assuming) Denmark's expecting a PYT to top for the night, Norway's going to want to be showing him why he shouldn't let him go.

But that's just me.

[sparklingtea]

/about to back track majorly

I agree with you though about that Denmark doesn't always top or Norway always tops, but when Denmark's drunk in my head, he does tend to be a bit more forceful. I think aseies did a good job with Norge topping the kiss, but of course with characters like Denmark and Norway (and most of Hetalia), a lot is put up to the writer of the fanfic.

I could definitely see what you supposed happened, happening though. Actually, now that you bring it up, I kind of prefer it.

[scheska]

im sorry but i have to say it u.u

Poor Gilbert! he even gets punched and the guy doesn't get a single thing of what's going on D:

there, no more complains xD

DENMARK x3, yeah, and as soon as they met they go stright to bed... thats the attitude xDD

i wonder how is Norway gonna... i dunno, how is gonna do anything at all now? "hey, i know you dont remember, but you are actually a country that no longer exists ... :D"

awesome... i hope you can get things to work out smoothly with college, im suffering some of that over here too... altough i know its not the same ._.

oh, and thah Humon Comic was great too :P

[aseies]

What is with you guys and Gilbert? /shot

You'll see~ Norway wonders the exact same thing xD

Thanks ;o; I'll do my best to keep this up~

You're welcome xD

[petenshi_hime]

I KNEW it. When I read all that stuff, I was like "
Oh that is SO Humon!"

Awww poor Prussia...
Stop quoting Twilight Denmark. I love you and all but it has to stop >:(

[aseies]

Haha yup~

Okay now you guys are doing just to bug me. /shot

Srsly. :| But don't worry, he doesn't do it again. Maybe. I can't remember. Not in a way that's pointed out, anyway.

[nickyliicious]

FINALLY THE POTATO QUOTE! Even though it's famous, it's not very used in fanfic. But I thought the potato was in their throat... or I read it wrong somewhere?

♫I don't feel sorry for Prussia at all~!♫ We will be fine on his own, besides I'm very overprotective with my DenNor so I will show no mercy with anyone who intends to get in the way, even if it's one if my fave characters (Prus)

♥.♥ "What I want to know, is what a guy like you was doing in a place like that, how you knew that jerk, and, most importantly, if you'll sleep with me."
...
O.O
T- T-THE... B-BEST.. P-PART... EVA...
[/fangasm]

Being lazy with RP account again

[swirlisthecurl]

Hahaha I probably just got the quote wrong... xD But I love it. <3

Whoooo! High five~ *yeah!* Haha That's the spirit~

Pfffft. Yes, I love that line.

Sorry for not being able to properly reply to you yet in the Q&A. I haven't had much free time.

You know... watching Norway smiling kinda...?

[nickyliicious]

So do I! Is awesome!

I simply don't understand why ppl feels sorry for Prussia. His awesome or his chick can save him anyway.

don't worry, I understand. Good luck with college! ♥