A Moment's Weakness - POTC Fanfic

[aquaseamage]

 I have written my very first "Pirates of the Caribbean" story. It's a romance featuring James and Elizabeth with minor appearences by other characters. The poetry bit is my own and it's style was inspired by the movie "A Knight's Tale". So without any further ado, here it is. Comments are welcome.

Title: A Moment’s Weakness
Author: Aquaseamage

Comments

[crossroadsangel]

That was a very enjoyable read and a refreshing turn of events! I love too how you handled the aftermath of the Interceptor and the cursed pirate attack on Dauntless. You also wrote James very well, especially the vulnerable/insecure aspect of him.

And sometimes it's fun to be a bit improper...
I can definitely see Elizabeth saying this!

Be a bold pirate and steal my kisses.
James' 'opportune moment' no doubt! I love how you phrased that! I've no doubt that underneath all that propriety is a tiger waiting to be set free and it will take someone as daring as Elizabeth to handle that tiger.

Just one question...did you know that the sailor who asked to pursue Sparrow at the end was Gillette, or did you intend it to be a different person?

Thanks for sharing and hope you write more!

[aquaseamage]

I'm glad you enjoyed my first PotC story and that I wrote James well. As I said before, I never wrote a story set in the "Pirates" universe so I never handled the characters before. The little bit I know of the military (or Navy if you will) is from watching and reading Classic Star Trek with Captain Kirk. Kirk's first name is also James, by the way. Not that I was writing Kirk (as he is very different) but I figure their duties to some degree are the same

[crossroadsangel]

That's great! I can't wait to read your parody!

[aquaseamage]

I just watched CotBP last night and paid closer attention to the two men with Norrington. Now I can tell Gillette and Groves apart. :)

[anonymous]

YES! THIS is how it should have ended!! (If only WE were writng POTC...hmmm...) And yes, there were mail carriers back then. Someone lower than Gillette would take it out, or Gillette would pass it on to someone lower.

Very well written!

[aquaseamage]

Thanks! Yes, I figured Gillette would pass it on to someone else. We can't have just anyone wondering into the Commodore's office, can we?

I figured there were some sort of mail carriers. I know there was the Pony Express in the US and didn't Wells Fargo sometimes handle mail? And the Victorian age had servents - footmen? - deliver letters for their wealthy masters.

Glad you enjoyed the story.

[anonymous]

I'd wander around Norrie's office...;)

[aquaseamage]

I think it would be interesting to explore his office and look at all the old-fashioned things. It would be similar to going to a museum. But I'd rather go explore the Dauntless or Interceptor. Tall ships are very pretty. Do you think Murtogg and Mullroy would allow a female civilian go onto the dock to LOOK at the ship? Not that I'd want to go out onto the water with one... Swimming is not my thing.

[artic_fox]

I enjoyed this very much! Very romantic and sweet, and I love how you wrote James. I hope very much you will write more in future :)

[aquaseamage]

Thank you. I'm glad I wrote James well. And yes, I will write more PotC fics in the future.

[lizzie_sparrow]

This was very cute. Your James was very much in character. =]

[aquaseamage]

Thanks! I'm glad to hear I did a good job of writing him.

[anonymous]

Very cute and the ending made my fangirl insides all mushy! So much Norribethy goodness...
Nicely written - how Pirates should have ended, in my humble opinion, but whatever - then we'd have no Scruffy!James.
Keep up the good work! Might we request more N/E fics? (wiggles eyebrows)

[aquaseamage]

Thanks for the review. :)

And yes, you may request more N/E fics. I have a few ideas and will see if I can put a plot together so I can start writing.

And Scruffy!James is always good. I think some of his sarcastic remarks to Jack is quite funny. You know, the compass is unique as in broken. Hee-hee!