FIC - Bankai Baby ~Urahara, Benihime PG

[annieroo2]

Title: Bankai Baby
Pairings/Characters: Urahara Kisuke and Benihime
Spoilers: none
Warnings: mild violence
Rating: PG
Word Count: 299
Word Limit:  300
Prompt: sultry
Written for: week #27 bleach_contest
Description: Kisuke thrust his zanpakutō into the tenshintai to compel Benihime to materialize.

Comments

[ceres_wish]

Amazing!!!! I absolutely love this, there's a lack of Urahara and Benihime fics!! And Benihime's sentence is awesome too, you portrayed her exactly how i visualised she'd be!!

Good job!! ^^

[annieroo2]

Thank you! It's so amazing to hear that you liked my description of Benihime. Benihime is basically like an OC and I am always terrified that my vision will be so skewed that no one can relate to it.

As always your comments are love. :D Thanks.

[hu3long2]

Love this take on Urahara's gaining bankai- we saw Zangetsu as a willing but stern teacher, and Benihime as supremely annoyed seems to convey to me a zanpakuto's feelings at being forced into materialization, and supremely seductive just seems like the kind of zanpakuto Urahara would have, companion to the not so shy but definitely genius.

Love the last line-- courage and the kind of "what if" question of a scientist! At least, I think it that way in relation to Urahara, with a strong dose of perv.

[vayshti]

I second hu3long2 about the last line - so very pervy scientist!

I like how you've made her tiny. I'm getting a very strong image of a traditional princess with her get-up. I can almost see foot-binding in play - which, hell. if she's done that then she really knows about pain.

[annieroo2]

I wanted Benihime to seem very much in vision like a Japanese Princess. But in actuality like a dominant bondage chick. So in essence she mimicked Urahara's tendency to look stupid and foolish when we all know he's a perverted genius.

I actually hadn't considered adding the foot bindings to her character. I wish I had because you're right it would have added more interest and depth to her understanding and willingness to inflict pain.

I must remember that if I ever manage to take this scene any further. I will be sure to credit you for the idea. ;p

I'm so happy her her image worked for you regardless. Thanks for reading and remarking. Comments are love. :D

[vayshti]

Oh yes, that contradiction between image and action (and the mirroring of Urahara's own 'act') came across fine. The traditional Japanese Princess was exactly what I was getting from the physical descriptions, and then your writing inspired me to take my own flights of fancy ;-).

Although - did they do the footbinding in Japan? I know of it only as a Chinese custom.

[laurie_bunter]

Whee. Finally I get to read one of your fics, and I'm glad to say I love this one <3 I always imagined Urahara's zapankutou to be a cruel female. Great job.

--off to read more!

[annieroo2]

Aw! You sweet woman, it's so nice you got a chance to read this.

I'm excited that my characterization of Benihime wasn't out in left field. It's always a relief to know when something I made up makes sense to someone else.

Thanks for taking the time to read and leave comments. Comments are love. ;P

[yawns_widely]

I like the sensual descriptions, because it makes his zanpakutou easy to visualise, and vocabularly is utilised well in such a short space.

I want the promise of smut to be continued.

Do eet!

[annieroo2]

LOL!! Ok I can't promise on the smut, but I'll try. Maybe I should have saved my one foray into BDSM to be with Benihime instead of Yoruichi. XD

[xshelaghx]

Oh I love your description of Benihime. She's perfect for Urahara :D

[annieroo2]

Yeah, perverted and cruel is probably just Urahara's speed for a zanpakutou. :D

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my story. Comments are love. ;p