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The Church and Its Orbs - The Wayward God

Aug 24, 2013 23:51

More The Church and Its Orbs. I'm still playing around in canon, but apparently Kai *really* wants a certain flaw.

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I’ve been looking for Kai, and I found the wayward god.

( 'You know Wren is going to kill you, right?' I mutter at him. )

pov: gemma, character: kai, original fiction, series: the church and its orbs, trigger: substance abuse, rating: pg-13, character: gemma

Comments 2

pixiebelle August 26 2013, 05:24:54 UTC

I like how you had Kai open up about liking Brandon. For those who didn't know, it'll come as a nice ah-ha moment and was written well. You asked what I thought about his drinking problem.. I think it lends itself to an interesting subplot, which is important. So play with it and see where it goes. I think it sounds great and can add more depth to the story. I liked how you handled Gemma's feelings over the kiss too. It felt real :)

alien_writings August 26 2013, 18:40:05 UTC

I'm glad Gemma's feelings seemed real -- romantic angst type feelings aren't my strength. It seems like Gemma in these new experimental sections is more contemplative and less overtly angry, which is more difficult for me since I can write anger better than regular angst. Though there's anger there under the surface, I think. Gemma does attack a priest with a holy object, after all.

I don't know if the drinking subplot becomes a major thing in the first book or second book or what. There's possibly going to be more than one Gemma book, but who knows? (I do know YA publishers seem to like everything to be a series, and Gemma's world, I think, has potential for that.) I'm totally hopping scenes right now, heh.

If it is in the second book, I wonder how the others could go so long without realizing he had a serious problem? Maybe if they were too busy dealing with other things?

Wren honestly kind of does only start to think it's an issue when Brandon points it out for the not-so-spectacular reason that she likes Brandon. Before that, ( ... )