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aisalynn

Fic: Bittersweet

Mar 27, 2009 06:34

Title: Bittersweet
Fandom: BtVS
Pairing: Spuffy
Rating: PG
Word Count: 2,003
Timeline: Takes place sometime during season 7.
Disclaimer: I don't own anything. I'm just playing around.
Summary: Unable to sleep, Buffy finds herself once again sharing a cup of hot chocolate with Spike.

A/N: Sequel to Hot Chocolate. This was supposed to be a ( Read more... )

buffy, fanfiction, spuffy

Comments 21

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aisalynn March 29 2009, 02:12:40 UTC

Thanks! :)

xtanitx March 27 2009, 14:16:19 UTC

Well, hooray for it ballooning past drabble stage. This was just lovely. I especially liked She was going to argue more but for the first time in a long time his voice wasn’t careful and polite, but soft and warm in a way she hadn’t heard since before he left for Africa. His face had that look of amused fondness that was so familiar that she looked away, nodding silently before she sat down at the island. It just made me smile and have an little internal "awww" moment. No denying she enjoys tender Spike.

Noticed two typos (hope you don't mind me pointing them out). passed the top shelf I think is supposed to be past and when their awake should be they're (I hate that one. It trips me up more than I care to admit! lol)

I've been enjoying your stories over on Elysian Fields; you have a gift. So glad you're sharing it. :)

aisalynn March 29 2009, 04:52:43 UTC

Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked the story, and I have to say, the part you quoted was one of my favorite parts to write. :)

Thanks for pointing out the typos, and please, feel free to do it anytime ;)

angearia March 27 2009, 14:26:23 UTC

Oh I loved it! I loved all the subtle touches you did here. The story just kept making my heart clench up and go awwww. Like when Buffy realized Spike had saved the hot chocolate makings for her, that he'd stopped eating human food because she couldn't afford one more mouth to feed, that he made the drink for her when she said how tired she was.

It was all just perfect. Perfect. And that moment when she realized he'd made it just like her mom used to, oh that made me want to cry. But I'm in public so I 'manned' up lol.

You had me the entire way, following everything through Buffy's POV. It's one of your greatest strengths in writing. How you make the reader effortlessly slip into the skin of the character. I could feel how tired she was, how her eyes ached as she rubbed them, how overcome she was at recognizing the flavor of the hot chocolate.

Truly superb. A perfect vignette that fits so nicely into Season 7. Love it.

Pseudo Beta Notice:

How she supposed to find anything in that mess?I think you meant to throw a " ( ... )

aisalynn March 29 2009, 05:02:40 UTC

*blushes and grins at POV comment* Thank you so much! When reading back through my stories I always worry about being too distant from the character I'm writing about, so you have no idea how happy it makes me that you think I do a good job at it.

I'm so happy you liked it and that all those little things made you go awww. And don't you hate it when you're reading fanfiction surrounded by people? When I was in highschool I would go to the library to read during study hall and I always had to tone down my reactions, or else people looked at tme funny.

Aha look! You are being an awesome beta already! *grins* Thanks for pointing that out, I'll go back through and fix it.

Once again, your comments rock. I love hearing from you. *big hug*

laugh_cry_live March 27 2009, 15:04:49 UTC

This is just beautiful, even better than the last! You managed to capture that subtle peace with each other that made it's way into the Spuffy relationship in S7... loved it! :) great work.

aisalynn March 29 2009, 05:04:39 UTC

Thank you so much! I adored their relationship in season seven so I just have so much fun writing about it.

Thanks for reading, dear. :)

penny_lane_42 March 27 2009, 15:17:27 UTC

I enjoy all your fics, but I especially love the S7 missing scene ones. You capture perfectly the mixture of comfort and awkwardness they take in each other during that time. This was just lovely.

aisalynn March 29 2009, 05:06:49 UTC

the mixture of comfort and awkwardness

Haha. That fits season 7 them perfectly. Thank you so much, hun. I'm glad you like the fics. Really, I just have so much fun writing them, especially the season 7 ones. There was just a lot of things that went unaddressed in that season. It makes good stuff to play with in fanfiction.