Comments | __vam: Help me Forget (One-shot)

marjohn666valo in __vam

Help me Forget (One-shot)

Jul 23, 2010 08:10

Title: Help Me Forget

Rating: PG-13

Paring: Vam, Bam/Missy

Summery: “If I tell you my biggest heart desire, will you tell me yours?” you were hugging your knees, your head resting upon them. You were only 29, recently engaged to a beautiful Finnish model, but looking so lonely there one could never guess. “It’s Jonna; everyone knows that.” Your eyes ( Read more... )

fic:one-shot, genre:angst, rating:pg, author:m

Comments 18

alicez17 July 23 2010, 16:56:28 UTC

I'm going to claim it before anyone else does, so:

FC!

;)

And now off to read!

marjohn666valo July 23 2010, 17:05:22 UTC

Oh you're fast! you surely deserve an FC! Hope you'll like what you read :)

snuggalicious July 23 2010, 17:08:47 UTC

That was a great story. Full of heartache,I was feeling sad while reading it...lol
Glad it ended with them being able to move past the hurt and remain friends

marjohn666valo July 23 2010, 17:19:53 UTC

Thank you so much for reading and commenting :D I remember when i first wrote it, i was feeling utterly crushed b/c something deep inside this story hit home and i just had to end it with an open ending or i would have shoot myself ,lol.

ex_mikkosgr July 23 2010, 17:12:02 UTC

yay!!! they could never not be friends :)

marjohn666valo July 23 2010, 17:24:25 UTC

I used a cliched line for the ending to suggest the opposite, that nothing's as easy as it seems. the fact that even when they're shaking hands Bam's still struggling with the past shows that they have a long way to heal completely. but they're gonna try, so that's still something :)
thanks for reading and commenting :D

alicez17 July 23 2010, 17:30:58 UTC

This was absolutely lovely.

I took a litle longer on responding, because I read the whole story twice instead of once, afraid that I was going to miss something.

I love the dream like opening of the story, where it already becomes apparent that Bam is certainly not over Ville yet. Then the internal struggle in Bam that follows up - What if it takes him back to square one? - is just heartbreaking. It is beautiful to see that he wants to move on, yet he cannot seem to let go of the past.

The dialogue is seemingly very realistic, and has a lovely flow to it, de descriptions likewise. I like the fact that Ville does not give in after a few apologies of Bam, but instead lets him find out the hurt he has caused Ville by himself. The fact that you made Ville rather distant, yet he is unable to keep his feelings from Bam any longer after a while - “Am I hurting you, Ville?” - “I deserve it.” - works very well for me ( ... )

marjohn666valo July 23 2010, 18:57:39 UTC

Thank you so much for your thorough review of the fic, i so adore long comments like this :D they make my heartbeats speed up ( ... )

alicez17 July 23 2010, 17:34:28 UTC

So sorry I meant:

* but instead lets him find out the reason how badly Ville has been hurting, but himself.

Again, amazing job<3