Broken - Chapter 14

Jul 05, 2007 20:04

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happiness, fic, broken

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2tailswaggin July 6 2007, 11:12:22 UTC
Thanks! Uh oh...is Cameron a dork because she doesn't know anything about bikes? She just knows she likes to see House on one...hehehe..

Smoother? hhmmm... ;)

Thanks for coming back yet again!

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2tailswaggin July 7 2007, 03:56:00 UTC
No dork!Cameron says things like: "Let’s see what this baby can do."

AAahhhhh....hehehe...got it. :) Dork!Cameron might just have to make a few more appearances just for you. hehe (actually she already has...go figure)

But you're making me worry with that hmmmm

hehehee....good.

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jovsg July 6 2007, 03:21:56 UTC
GUH!!!!

I love you so much. This story just keeps getting deeper, better, more satisfying with each chapter ( ... )

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2tailswaggin July 6 2007, 11:22:11 UTC
Okay josvg...nothing I can write here can tell you how much I needed your comments. I was just talking to bmax when they came in and telling her I was losing steam and the readers were losing interest. Then this...gah! Thank you so much for taking the time to give such indept feedback.

I'm glad you enjoyed the first half of the chapter...I'm such an introspective sap...I loved writing that. lol And I'm glad you seemed to get out of it exactly what I was trying to put into it! :)

Anyway...thanks again!! :)

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2tailswaggin July 6 2007, 11:22:43 UTC
hehe...*blush*...and there I went and spelled your name wrong. geez. ;)

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tiflissa July 6 2007, 03:30:30 UTC
Yay! So glad to see the next part of this, hon! Can I just say, my favorite part was the baseball metaphor? Made me laugh like crazy! Such a great chapter. I had to giggle at Cameron calling the bike 'pretty'. =)

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2tailswaggin July 6 2007, 11:26:55 UTC
Hey girl! :) This one was a bit slow in coming huh? I think it's gonna be that way for a while now - I want to finish this properly. I hope everyone sticks with it.

LOL...*hug*...I'm glad you liked the baseball metaphor! I thought it worked...hehe.. poor House.

Bmax pointed one of those bikes out to me last weekend (we gave House a bike just like hers ya know)...'pretty' is not a word I'd use...lol. But whatever.....

Thanks again Tiff!!

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moozer72 July 6 2007, 03:31:25 UTC
I love this story!! I'm glad things are slowly getting back to normal for them! : )

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2tailswaggin July 6 2007, 11:28:46 UTC
Thank you! :) I'm glad you're enjoying it and sticking with it. Back to normal...hhmm....ok. ;)

Thanks again for reading and for the comments.

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silvak July 6 2007, 07:04:18 UTC
I decided to read your story here instead of FF.

What can I say?I think you outdid yourself...The first part of the chapter filled with their insecurities and fears had me really wondering if this would be the end of them..."House had been in love before, and he knew what it felt like. He also knew what it felt like when it suddenly wasn’t there. He knew he needed to quickly decide how badly he wanted the game.",I loved those lines...

Now,as for the rest of the chapter!!!Nicely done!!!It was so good seeing House feel free again,going away from the harsh reality and yet feeling also attached to something or more precisely someone...

You are doing a great job with this story...As always,I can't wait for more...Hope you update soon...Bye for now...

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2tailswaggin July 6 2007, 11:32:09 UTC
Hey! I thought I saw your ID on another story the other day! Cool...jesmel maybe? Thanks for all the great feedback over at ff.net...I really do appreciate it! And here too!...cool.

I was afraid repeating the "House had been in love before" part a second time was going to be a little too melodramatic...but I liked it enough to keep it. lol I'm pleased you liked it too!

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for keeping up with it and for all the great comments...

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silvak July 6 2007, 12:01:10 UTC
it was probably on jesmel's story,who by the way does a very good job too with her story...I saw you did the beta and start reading it...

I liked the "House had been in love before" especially the second time,because it intensified the moment and put more emphasis on his fears and insecurities...So I think you did a good job keeping it...

I guess I'll talk to you soon...Bye for now...:-)

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2tailswaggin July 7 2007, 03:52:07 UTC
it was probably on jesmel's story,who by the way does a very good job too with her story

Yes she is...I'm totally hooked!

I'm very glad the drama worked...thanks.

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