3323: He's My Son - Annabeth Volturi
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- Flashback Sue is... well, check it out.
TITLE: He's My Son
PERPETRATOR: Annabeth Volturi (Haven't I featured something from her before?)
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: It is a clip of their avatar, which is a picture of someone.
SUMMARY:”Harry finds out Snape is his father, but Snape doesn't want him and his friends leave him. Harry tries to end it all with suicide, but is saved at the last minute by a woman who becomes his adoptive mother. He goes to Durmstrang and makes new friends, but when he returns for the Tri-Wizard tournament all new problems arise from old faces. Slash, HPxVK, SSxOC.”
FULL NAME: Harry Potter. Charlotte Sophia Prewett
SPECIES: Harry is the son of Lily and Snape instead of Lily and James. Charlotte is supposed to be Molly Weasley's niece.
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: Charlotte has a castle located in Paris, France.
CONNECTION TO CANON: The first chapter opens up with a suicidal Harry flashing back to when he is bullied off the Quiditch team despite the fact his fellow team mates aren't bullies like the writer makes them out to be. “Harry let the memory play in his head several more times before he finally held the tip of his wand to his left wrist and muttered the cutting curse.” Myrtle goes and gets him help despite the fact she wants him to die and become a ghost with her. Hermione, Ron, Ginny and the twins are called out because “Harry Potter did you all great favors, and you abandoned him when he needed you.” This is justified because of the bullying the teachers knew about, but did nothing to stop as well as the fact Hermione voices the assumption they made that Harry will go dark like his father. Despite the claims that “Snape doesn't want him” the man obviously wants him. Charlotte... who is to likely be Snape's future lover... is allowed to walk into the Dursley family and give her mother's name of Serenity Prewett. They allow her to leave with Harry. She then begins to patronize Harry and has him go to a different school.
ORIGIN: We have yet another story where the main character is abandoned by everyone else because of a reason the writer has managed to blow to unrealistic proportions.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Harry knows a special curse that is the “cutting curse”. That is wrong on so many levels. Hermione assumes he will go dark like Snape despite the fact she should know better. They are also able to tell he committed suicide because of how much blood was lost.
NOTES: This particular fanfic makes me see red. The “cutting curse” is beyond tacky. The bit about being able to tell if someone committed suicide by the amount of blood lost is insulting. I'm not going to read past the second chapter. I decided to read the reviews to see if the writer received criticism for any of their chapters... but nope. They've only gotten praise. Unless you count the quest review from someone whose obviously trolling. It's not really a negative review. Here...
“Hello my name is Nelly Emily i know you are facing problems like the one i faced but i found a solution and the solution is Priest Grace of , he is a great spell caster, i was having an issue with my husband, the loved we have shared for 10 years seemed to be falling apart, he was drifting away from home from his responsibilities and our three wonderful kids i was devastated until i encountered the great spell caster who helped me out now we are loving happily ever after,i have to tell you my friends in this forum that this is real contact him on his email on or for any problem you might be facing for he can help you out of any situation okay, Thanks great Priest once again your child Emily from USA”
SAMPLE:
"I have to end this…" Harry Potter sat down in the middle of the girl's bathroom haunted by Moaning Myrtle. His face was blotchy red with tear-streaked cheeks, his eyes were puffy from crying, and his fists were clenched together hard, but one contained his wand.
He had been in the bathroom for nearly two hours already, and it was past dinner but he didn't care. He hadn't eaten a thing all day; he didn't have the appetite anymore. Just the other day he'd found out some accidental news, but the same news that would be considered good news, turned out to be the worst news ever once it got around the school.
Flashback:
"Hey Potter!" Harry was walking on his way to Quidditch practice when he was cornered by a gang of Slytherins he didn't recognize, probably sixth years. "Is it true? C'mon tell us is it?"
"Is what true?" he tried to pretend he didn't know.
"Is it true you're Snape's son?" he froze when they said that. "Hah it is! His face is turning red!"
"Leave me alone." Harry tried to walk away but one of them grabbed his arm.
"Hey what's the rush? It's not like anyone's going to help you anyway." they shoved him down into the wall and one of the bigger boys took his Nimbus breaking it in half. Throwing the pieces down at him he felt one hit his right cheek, and they just laughed. "It's a good thing Snape doesn't want you, you're not worthy of being his son." they spat at him, and then left.
'Like I don't already know that.' Harry tried to repair his Nimbus but it was cracked bad, he would have to send it in but after he walked to the pitch trying to grab a new broom Oliver Wood came up to him.
"Harry…I'm sorry but I have to cut you from the team." Harry stared at him.
"Wha…why? Is it because of my broom I can borrow one…"
"No Harry, look I don't want to do this but…the rest of the team wants you off. They've all threatened to turn in their brooms and no one else will audition as long as you're still on."
"Is this because of Snape?" he knew it was.
"I think so, but Harry personally I don't see anything wrong. If it were up to me I would keep you, you're the best seeker we've had in a while. I just…look I'll try talking to them but…"
- Flashback Sue is... well, check it out.
TITLE: He's My Son
PERPETRATOR: Annabeth Volturi (Haven't I featured something from her before?)
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: It is a clip of their avatar, which is a picture of someone.
SUMMARY:”Harry finds out Snape is his father, but Snape doesn't want him and his friends leave him. Harry tries to end it all with suicide, but is saved at the last minute by a woman who becomes his adoptive mother. He goes to Durmstrang and makes new friends, but when he returns for the Tri-Wizard tournament all new problems arise from old faces. Slash, HPxVK, SSxOC.”
FULL NAME: Harry Potter. Charlotte Sophia Prewett
SPECIES: Harry is the son of Lily and Snape instead of Lily and James. Charlotte is supposed to be Molly Weasley's niece.
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: Charlotte has a castle located in Paris, France.
CONNECTION TO CANON: The first chapter opens up with a suicidal Harry flashing back to when he is bullied off the Quiditch team despite the fact his fellow team mates aren't bullies like the writer makes them out to be. “Harry let the memory play in his head several more times before he finally held the tip of his wand to his left wrist and muttered the cutting curse.” Myrtle goes and gets him help despite the fact she wants him to die and become a ghost with her. Hermione, Ron, Ginny and the twins are called out because “Harry Potter did you all great favors, and you abandoned him when he needed you.” This is justified because of the bullying the teachers knew about, but did nothing to stop as well as the fact Hermione voices the assumption they made that Harry will go dark like his father. Despite the claims that “Snape doesn't want him” the man obviously wants him. Charlotte... who is to likely be Snape's future lover... is allowed to walk into the Dursley family and give her mother's name of Serenity Prewett. They allow her to leave with Harry. She then begins to patronize Harry and has him go to a different school.
ORIGIN: We have yet another story where the main character is abandoned by everyone else because of a reason the writer has managed to blow to unrealistic proportions.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Harry knows a special curse that is the “cutting curse”. That is wrong on so many levels. Hermione assumes he will go dark like Snape despite the fact she should know better. They are also able to tell he committed suicide because of how much blood was lost.
NOTES: This particular fanfic makes me see red. The “cutting curse” is beyond tacky. The bit about being able to tell if someone committed suicide by the amount of blood lost is insulting. I'm not going to read past the second chapter. I decided to read the reviews to see if the writer received criticism for any of their chapters... but nope. They've only gotten praise. Unless you count the quest review from someone whose obviously trolling. It's not really a negative review. Here...
“Hello my name is Nelly Emily i know you are facing problems like the one i faced but i found a solution and the solution is Priest Grace of , he is a great spell caster, i was having an issue with my husband, the loved we have shared for 10 years seemed to be falling apart, he was drifting away from home from his responsibilities and our three wonderful kids i was devastated until i encountered the great spell caster who helped me out now we are loving happily ever after,i have to tell you my friends in this forum that this is real contact him on his email on or for any problem you might be facing for he can help you out of any situation okay, Thanks great Priest once again your child Emily from USA”
SAMPLE:
"I have to end this…" Harry Potter sat down in the middle of the girl's bathroom haunted by Moaning Myrtle. His face was blotchy red with tear-streaked cheeks, his eyes were puffy from crying, and his fists were clenched together hard, but one contained his wand.
He had been in the bathroom for nearly two hours already, and it was past dinner but he didn't care. He hadn't eaten a thing all day; he didn't have the appetite anymore. Just the other day he'd found out some accidental news, but the same news that would be considered good news, turned out to be the worst news ever once it got around the school.
Flashback:
"Hey Potter!" Harry was walking on his way to Quidditch practice when he was cornered by a gang of Slytherins he didn't recognize, probably sixth years. "Is it true? C'mon tell us is it?"
"Is what true?" he tried to pretend he didn't know.
"Is it true you're Snape's son?" he froze when they said that. "Hah it is! His face is turning red!"
"Leave me alone." Harry tried to walk away but one of them grabbed his arm.
"Hey what's the rush? It's not like anyone's going to help you anyway." they shoved him down into the wall and one of the bigger boys took his Nimbus breaking it in half. Throwing the pieces down at him he felt one hit his right cheek, and they just laughed. "It's a good thing Snape doesn't want you, you're not worthy of being his son." they spat at him, and then left.
'Like I don't already know that.' Harry tried to repair his Nimbus but it was cracked bad, he would have to send it in but after he walked to the pitch trying to grab a new broom Oliver Wood came up to him.
"Harry…I'm sorry but I have to cut you from the team." Harry stared at him.
"Wha…why? Is it because of my broom I can borrow one…"
"No Harry, look I don't want to do this but…the rest of the team wants you off. They've all threatened to turn in their brooms and no one else will audition as long as you're still on."
"Is this because of Snape?" he knew it was.
"I think so, but Harry personally I don't see anything wrong. If it were up to me I would keep you, you're the best seeker we've had in a while. I just…look I'll try talking to them but…"