Good, genuinely awesome Team Rocket fanfiction is SO HARD to come by, and yet, here's an example of it. And not many show the inner workings of the organization either- something I spend a lot of time thinking about in my headcanon. Showing them as villains, but very grey ones is another thing I see all too little of in fanfiction, and I love that you as well give TR an honor code that bans rape or killing children.
I cannot wait to see more of this story. Please get future chapters up as soon as possible- this is a truly great fanfiction.
I knew when I saw this prompt I would have to make it just as focused on Team Rocket as it was supposed to be on Green, Red and Leaf. I think that since the games are so lax in developing their antagonists, a lot of fanfiction writers shy away from their one-dimensional flatness or just typecast them as the archetypal "evil villain." I didn't want that for this story. I wanted to make each character sympathetic in some way, and I'm so glad that it seems to paying off.
This is definitely the most demanding project I've ever undertaken, but be assured that it has 100% of my attention when RL isn't in the way. Act II is currently in the works and about 75% done. Once I get it to my beta, I should be able to post it. I hope I can do that soon.
It's incredibly rewarding to hear such positive feedback. Thank you again, so much. I really appreciate the time you took to read this...I know it's excessively long...
I'm the same way in my writing- I treat Rockets as human beings, with emotions and motivations beyond doing it for the evulz. I think there's so much more to Team Rocket that the games/anime only hint at- the girl in the Sevii Islands warehouse's dialogue, for example. It's pretty clear they're not your typical secret organization, so I love to see some creativity in their portrayal.
I really liked this, but oh god was it hard. Like, I simultaneously get caught up in (what I see as) the false honor of Giovanni, a little bit, and lash out at it. Not murdering children and not raping anyone does not make you a good man. But Giovanni thinks it does, or at least, that it makes him something other than evil, and that's... troubling. It's difficult to read him, this way, when authorizing the repeated beatings of children is okay but killing them somehow isn't. (I think this might be why some people find it easier to just write him as straight-up evil? I don't want to twist my head into that knot.)
My strong feelings about this are inspired by how well you have told this story so far. Gaaaaah. It's so twitchy but I want to see what happens and I really want to know what you do with Silver
Oh my Arceus, you are getting even better in this and really, you are the master of handling emotions and psychology of the characters. It's rare to find fics with such great view of realistic characters. I love this. Many scenes were painful to read because they were well written and conveyed the pain exactly the way it should be. The only complain I have is for describing blood and wound as rubies. Blood does not look like rubies. At most they look like impure cinnabar ore, but no, not even. Blood is blood. But after all the nitpick this is the only thing that bothered me. You know how to pace the plot, how to set the intensity of scenes, the tone and all that. You know how to punctuate (voc?) the emotions. You give each character distinct, strong personality that fit with canon. You conveyed the pride of a child who first saw the frightening illusions of the world crumble and reveal truth and vulnerability. You remember the age of the characters and write them the way they should be. I'm seen too many fics were 10 year-old act like
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Your comments are always a good mixture of constructive criticism and praise, so I can always learn a thing or two from them. I really appreciate that.
That being said, the fact that you commented positively on my characterization of Green and Red puts me at ease. I'll admit that I had a lot of worries about this. I'm not too experienced in writing from a child's perspective and was concerned that I might make them seem like they were, like you mentioned, young adults. I was hoping that I could skirt by on the grace of them being geniuses (who else could win the Championship as ten-year-olds?), but it seems that I've somehow succeeded in keeping them in character. I hope I can keep this up. This fic takes place over the course of a decade, so I'm hoping that I can keep pacing their developments appropriately.
I was originally going to devote a lot more time detailing the conditioning process, but I had to cut it back due to time constraints and the fact that I didn't want to split what was originally a single chapter into three
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And in response to your question about Red (sorry, I hadn't noticed that I left it unanswered before):
Yes and no. I know I might draw a lot of criticism for the direction I'll be taking Red in this fic. I'll probably draw some for what I do with Green too, but I think that relative to the games, maybe the direction I take Red is the most out of character.
I'm not going to say where I take him, but I will say that it has a lot to do with this perception of his and the environment he's been thrust into.
I think Red operates on the presumption that there are no bad pokémon, just bad trainers that make their pokémon bad. I watched the episode where Meowth explains this to the other pokémon a long time ago (I believe it's the one where they get separated from their trainers and have to fend for themselves against those robotic pokémon), but it stuck with me.
Sorry that I skirted around your question, but the best answer I can give is... wait and see? That's a cop-out, I know, but I don't want to spoil it for you.
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Good, genuinely awesome Team Rocket fanfiction is SO HARD to come by, and yet, here's an example of it. And not many show the inner workings of the organization either- something I spend a lot of time thinking about in my headcanon. Showing them as villains, but very grey ones is another thing I see all too little of in fanfiction, and I love that you as well give TR an honor code that bans rape or killing children.
I cannot wait to see more of this story. Please get future chapters up as soon as possible- this is a truly great fanfiction.
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I knew when I saw this prompt I would have to make it just as focused on Team Rocket as it was supposed to be on Green, Red and Leaf. I think that since the games are so lax in developing their antagonists, a lot of fanfiction writers shy away from their one-dimensional flatness or just typecast them as the archetypal "evil villain." I didn't want that for this story. I wanted to make each character sympathetic in some way, and I'm so glad that it seems to paying off.
This is definitely the most demanding project I've ever undertaken, but be assured that it has 100% of my attention when RL isn't in the way. Act II is currently in the works and about 75% done. Once I get it to my beta, I should be able to post it. I hope I can do that soon.
It's incredibly rewarding to hear such positive feedback. Thank you again, so much. I really appreciate the time you took to read this...I know it's excessively long...
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This made me go "Noooooo!"
I really liked this, but oh god was it hard. Like, I simultaneously get caught up in (what I see as) the false honor of Giovanni, a little bit, and lash out at it. Not murdering children and not raping anyone does not make you a good man. But Giovanni thinks it does, or at least, that it makes him something other than evil, and that's... troubling. It's difficult to read him, this way, when authorizing the repeated beatings of children is okay but killing them somehow isn't. (I think this might be why some people find it easier to just write him as straight-up evil? I don't want to twist my head into that knot.)
My strong feelings about this are inspired by how well you have told this story so far. Gaaaaah. It's so twitchy but I want to see what happens and I really want to know what you do with Silver
Thank you for writing and sharing this!
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That being said, the fact that you commented positively on my characterization of Green and Red puts me at ease. I'll admit that I had a lot of worries about this. I'm not too experienced in writing from a child's perspective and was concerned that I might make them seem like they were, like you mentioned, young adults. I was hoping that I could skirt by on the grace of them being geniuses (who else could win the Championship as ten-year-olds?), but it seems that I've somehow succeeded in keeping them in character. I hope I can keep this up. This fic takes place over the course of a decade, so I'm hoping that I can keep pacing their developments appropriately.
I was originally going to devote a lot more time detailing the conditioning process, but I had to cut it back due to time constraints and the fact that I didn't want to split what was originally a single chapter into three ( ... )
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Yes and no. I know I might draw a lot of criticism for the direction I'll be taking Red in this fic. I'll probably draw some for what I do with Green too, but I think that relative to the games, maybe the direction I take Red is the most out of character.
I'm not going to say where I take him, but I will say that it has a lot to do with this perception of his and the environment he's been thrust into.
I think Red operates on the presumption that there are no bad pokémon, just bad trainers that make their pokémon bad. I watched the episode where Meowth explains this to the other pokémon a long time ago (I believe it's the one where they get separated from their trainers and have to fend for themselves against those robotic pokémon), but it stuck with me.
Sorry that I skirted around your question, but the best answer I can give is... wait and see? That's a cop-out, I know, but I don't want to spoil it for you.
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