Your comments are always a good mixture of constructive criticism and praise, so I can always learn a thing or two from them. I really appreciate that.
That being said, the fact that you commented positively on my characterization of Green and Red puts me at ease. I'll admit that I had a lot of worries about this. I'm not too experienced in writing from a child's perspective and was concerned that I might make them seem like they were, like you mentioned, young adults. I was hoping that I could skirt by on the grace of them being geniuses (who else could win the Championship as ten-year-olds?), but it seems that I've somehow succeeded in keeping them in character. I hope I can keep this up. This fic takes place over the course of a decade, so I'm hoping that I can keep pacing their developments appropriately.
I was originally going to devote a lot more time detailing the conditioning process, but I had to cut it back due to time constraints and the fact that I didn't want to split what was originally a single chapter into three chapters. In reality, I'm a Creative Writing major/prospective Biology minor who's currently seeking a second major to round myself off. I have studied psychology before though, so I knew that the transformation, particularly Green's, had to be paced appropriately.
About the rubies... in retrospect, that was a bit purple of me. My intention was to compare the blood to rubies in order to grant an insight into how "precious" the sight of Archer bleeding was to Green... Obviously, it didn't really work out.
I'm glad you're interested in this and are enjoying it. This is a very demanding project, mostly because I keep adding layer upon layer to it. I've mentioned that one of the reasons I'm doing this is to make each of the characters nuanced and sympathetic in some way, but it's also because I'm going to be adding some political, cultural, diplomatic, and ethical depth to the fic in the next few updates... that's the History nerd in me shining through, I guess.
Again, thank you so much for your comment and the constructive criticism! I hope you are as pleased with what's to come!
That being said, the fact that you commented positively on my characterization of Green and Red puts me at ease. I'll admit that I had a lot of worries about this. I'm not too experienced in writing from a child's perspective and was concerned that I might make them seem like they were, like you mentioned, young adults. I was hoping that I could skirt by on the grace of them being geniuses (who else could win the Championship as ten-year-olds?), but it seems that I've somehow succeeded in keeping them in character. I hope I can keep this up. This fic takes place over the course of a decade, so I'm hoping that I can keep pacing their developments appropriately.
I was originally going to devote a lot more time detailing the conditioning process, but I had to cut it back due to time constraints and the fact that I didn't want to split what was originally a single chapter into three chapters. In reality, I'm a Creative Writing major/prospective Biology minor who's currently seeking a second major to round myself off. I have studied psychology before though, so I knew that the transformation, particularly Green's, had to be paced appropriately.
About the rubies... in retrospect, that was a bit purple of me. My intention was to compare the blood to rubies in order to grant an insight into how "precious" the sight of Archer bleeding was to Green... Obviously, it didn't really work out.
I'm glad you're interested in this and are enjoying it. This is a very demanding project, mostly because I keep adding layer upon layer to it. I've mentioned that one of the reasons I'm doing this is to make each of the characters nuanced and sympathetic in some way, but it's also because I'm going to be adding some political, cultural, diplomatic, and ethical depth to the fic in the next few updates... that's the History nerd in me shining through, I guess.
Again, thank you so much for your comment and the constructive criticism! I hope you are as pleased with what's to come!
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