Comments | gothic_tampons: First Chapter plus Marni pic.

gothic_tampons

First Chapter plus Marni pic.

May 28, 2009 17:45

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tuff_ghost May 28 2009, 22:31:09 UTC

It's cute, good length, good details. And the OC is...not unbearable. :D

I have a bit of a thing for mute characters; it was really the only thing that kept me reading The Stand for as long as I did.

Just a heads up though: when you link this fic in comms, your posts make the fic look a lot worse than it is. Things like capitalizing "fanfic" for no reason, apostrophes in plurals (eg: plural's), way too much apologizing for your OC at the beginning. There's no need to even mention the OC, just let the fic speak for itself and watch out for trivial mechanical errors that will turn people off from even giving you a chance.

gothic_tampons May 28 2009, 22:38:44 UTC

Wewt.

And yeah...Sorry about that, I was just in a shitty mood when I wrote that. I'll go and edit it.

miss_bushido June 11 2009, 04:21:03 UTC

I can definitely see promise in this ( ... )

gothic_tampons June 16 2009, 01:18:50 UTC

Thanks!

por_queeee June 16 2009, 00:36:00 UTC

This certainly seems like it could be a good fic, but there are a few things bothering me. Hopefully you won't mind if I offer some constructive criticism ( ... )

gothic_tampons June 16 2009, 01:17:59 UTC

Thanks for the crit.

Actually I am gunna tell you a bit on why Ror was so willing to take the pill's in the next chapter.

But don't worry, I am really thankfull for the crit and it's actually makeing me think of Re writeing the First chapter before I do the second one.

It's actually been a lot of help!