Betrayed: Chapter 6

Apr 30, 2011 11:46

ZeldaQueen: In which the plot shows up, drunk out of its mind and staggering

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book 2, suethor: kristin cast, fic: betrayed, series: house of night, suethor: pc cast, chapter 6

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mogseltof April 30 2011, 16:58:48 UTC
"...I will publicly declare Bella Swan to be a feminist character on par with Jane Eyre."

Please, nobody even attempt to take up that challenge. I quite like my universe non-exploded.

Blergh. Flatty McFlat characters with Barely There Plot (TM). Fabuloutastic.

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yemi_hikari May 1 2011, 06:49:48 UTC
I took up the challenge for a few minutes and failed. But then, I knew I would.

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wtf queenie315 April 30 2011, 18:05:12 UTC
"Damn shame when something happens to any cute
guy-no matter what color, Twin...We shouldn't discriminate. Cuteness is cuteness".

This is just...Oh my god, how can an editor look at this and take his/her clients seriously. Like WTF is that? don't discriminate kids! Black guys are cute too! And then with the conversation about how pot is bad for you...geez its like PC cast writes down stupid morals and Kristin tries to make those morals sound cool with her stereotypical teenage vernacular.

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Re: wtf yemi_hikari May 1 2011, 06:50:35 UTC
Because the younger Cast claims this is how teenagers really do speak, which is a bunch of bull that I think they brought up simply to cover their overly bad dialog.

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Re: wtf queenie315 May 2 2011, 18:21:29 UTC
Oh they are wrong then, I'm positive this dialogue couldn't be any worse

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Re: wtf zelda_queen May 2 2011, 19:21:49 UTC
You...really don't want to make assumptions like that. It's like guessing that Meyer couldn't get any creepier.

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turtlecrackers April 30 2011, 18:06:59 UTC
I just can't get over how mean-spirited these people are. Why are we supposed to root for them? I want to see them fail miserably and have their black souls eaten by something nasty. e_e;

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yemi_hikari May 1 2011, 06:50:51 UTC
I do too.

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turtlecrackers May 1 2011, 11:10:29 UTC
Oh, and I just noticed that they're watching Fox News? Now, we don't get Fox over here, but I think there are way better news channels to get information from...
I do remember a "news story" they aired about predators using the Nintendo DS to contact children in cars on the highways through the Pictochat function...

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lurkythespork May 2 2011, 18:33:36 UTC
More so than that, how about showing us that the vampyres are hip and with-it by having a Sanguinophage News Network--ideally on the Internet (which was, of course, CLEARLY invented by a vampyre)?

Oh, that's right, they wouldn't give two rats' farts about a mere human.

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detritius April 30 2011, 18:07:06 UTC
Bleh, I hate it when Zoey gets a feeling about something. It's so Sueish and contrived. You know what would be nice, Cast ladies? If your protagonist was intelligent enough to figure out the plot her own damn self, instead of having to be guided through it like a blind puppy ( ... )

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yemi_hikari May 1 2011, 06:52:25 UTC
When my classmates and I were in this demographic, a good deal of us weren't in this demographic either, including the football players. It was only a select few.

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carakasla April 30 2011, 20:56:50 UTC
My boyfriend is a boxer and god forbid you get him to have even a sip of alcohol! Sure, we have friends who drink and do pot (and the pot smokers are the nicest people you could ever meet) but that doesn't mean him, nor I, do that also.

Oh, and I'd totally read that book. If it existed.

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yemi_hikari May 1 2011, 06:56:25 UTC
High school sterotypes
Ode to how I hate thee
Thy have no context
Within the majority
Only the minority
Goodness knows all
Get the hell lost

Couldn't honstly help myself here.

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I think you just gave us the plot for the round robin spite fic I and a few others are doing. We're trying to do something where Aphrodite is the protaganist and that is the real story, at least in the pretend sense of things.

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zelda_queen May 2 2011, 19:27:58 UTC
"Yeah, I can see a jock character who drinks and does drugs, but in there, so far it's been all jocks!"

And Kayla, don't forget her.

"Don't the Cast ladies know that a real athlete would probably try to stay away from the stuff so it wouldn't screw with his/her performance, so they could have clean test results for any drug tests administered, so they could get a good sports scholarship?"

Well, given how Heath was somehow perpetually drunk throughout the last book, I guess drug and alcohol tests don't exist in this weird universe.

And Aphrodite so deserves her own book. She's way more complex and interesting than Zoey.

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