Heart Of The Sea: Chapter 20 - The Kraken

[zelda_queen]

ZeldaQueen: Before we start off, I'd like to apologize for the lack of activity as of late. I'm juggling school and work and I'm a bit busy. Fear not though, I'll update when able, plus I've got a third sporking being readied!

Comments

[carakasla]

Buzznuh, was that suppose to be an action chapter? Dude, it was like, one minute the boat is shaking 'cause the Kraken hit it then next, Will and the Sue (ha, biotch, I put Will before you!) are scrambling up the mast. There was no sense of 'OMGWTF IS GOING ON?!'. I feel like I'm missing something...AGAIN.

There...seriously isn't tentacle sex...is there? I mean, not like, hentai levels...right? o.O

[zelda_queen]

I don't know. I haven't read it. Mervin called dibs. All I know is that it involves his beard and...erm...

And yes, Gethesemane sucks at action. She's much like Meyer in that regard.

[witty_screename]

And yes, Gethesemane sucks at action. She's much like Meyer in that regard.

Well, I will give her half a point for not totally skipping it like Meyer does, but then again, she practically does since the Kraken's attack felt like ten seconds in this story. No detail on what the Kraken looked like, no sense of urgency, no description of the desolation is caused, or the people it killed...I'd say Gethesemane is more like Meyer in the sense that, if it doesn't relate to her SI and love interest, then it ultimately doesn't matter.

I'd like to apologize for the lack of activity as of late. I'm juggling school and work and I'm a bit busy.

No need to ;] You have a life, as we all do XD (Well, minus Gethsemane and Meyer.)

[zelda_queen]

I don't know what's worse. I think Meyer outright said at one point that she'd have no sad endings, so I don't think anyone seriously thought she'd off an important character. Even so, skipping the climaxes was really bad form. With Gethesemane, she goes on like she WILL do anything for the plot, but still keeps her main characters alive and skims the climax.

"No need to ;] You have a life, as we all do XD (Well, minus Gethsemane and Meyer.)"

Aw. XD But still, I hope to move things along once I have everything balanced out. ^^

[mogseltof]

I am very glad you specified the tentacly sex isn't til later. *shudders*. Although seriously, what a way to ruin a brilliant character...

[zelda_queen]

Yeah, don't worry, there'll be heads up on that. I...I really don't know what she was thinking with that. Really.

[parrinoyed]

I laughed aloud in disbelief when she wanted him to turn the ship around, 'cause, hey, she's got places to be! right?

What can I say? I've never written a spork, because I just can't bear to read it without commentary. So props to you! I marvel at your ability to do it at all, and send my encouragement to slow down as much as you need--I'd hate to hear of an accidental overdose ;)

[zelda_queen]

I couldn't believe that either. She's such a brat.

Now see in my case, I kind of have to spork otherwise my head would asplode in anger if I read something like this. Gotta let off the steam and all.

Thank you very much! And don't worry, steady as she goes! The really bad stuff is yet to come.

[southerngaelic]

"My husband is Jack Sparrow!"

With that, the crew promptly restrained her and threw her into the brig, to be turned over to the nearest authorities. Will was smart enough to deny any personal relationship with the Sue and escaped. Canon resumed as normal. The end

[southerngaelic]

That was fantastic. I think I'll go watch The Black Pearl now. *walks off, whistling*

[zelda_queen]

God, don't I wish.