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Heart Of The Sea: Chapter 20 - The Kraken

Jan 14, 2011 17:45

ZeldaQueen: Before we start off, I'd like to apologize for the lack of activity as of late. I'm juggling school and work and I'm a bit busy. Fear not though, I'll update when able, plus I've got a third sporking being readied!

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suethor: gethesemane butler, fic: heart of the sea, chapter 20, the kraken

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carakasla January 14 2011, 23:23:50 UTC

Buzznuh, was that suppose to be an action chapter? Dude, it was like, one minute the boat is shaking 'cause the Kraken hit it then next, Will and the Sue (ha, biotch, I put Will before you!) are scrambling up the mast. There was no sense of 'OMGWTF IS GOING ON?!'. I feel like I'm missing something...AGAIN.

There...seriously isn't tentacle sex...is there? I mean, not like, hentai levels...right? o.O

zelda_queen January 14 2011, 23:57:11 UTC

I don't know. I haven't read it. Mervin called dibs. All I know is that it involves his beard and...erm...

And yes, Gethesemane sucks at action. She's much like Meyer in that regard.

witty_screename January 15 2011, 01:33:18 UTC

And yes, Gethesemane sucks at action. She's much like Meyer in that regard.

Well, I will give her half a point for not totally skipping it like Meyer does, but then again, she practically does since the Kraken's attack felt like ten seconds in this story. No detail on what the Kraken looked like, no sense of urgency, no description of the desolation is caused, or the people it killed...I'd say Gethesemane is more like Meyer in the sense that, if it doesn't relate to her SI and love interest, then it ultimately doesn't matter.

I'd like to apologize for the lack of activity as of late. I'm juggling school and work and I'm a bit busy.

No need to ;] You have a life, as we all do XD (Well, minus Gethsemane and Meyer.)

zelda_queen January 15 2011, 03:31:50 UTC

I don't know what's worse. I think Meyer outright said at one point that she'd have no sad endings, so I don't think anyone seriously thought she'd off an important character. Even so, skipping the climaxes was really bad form. With Gethesemane, she goes on like she WILL do anything for the plot, but still keeps her main characters alive and skims the climax.

"No need to ;] You have a life, as we all do XD (Well, minus Gethsemane and Meyer.)"

Aw. XD But still, I hope to move things along once I have everything balanced out. ^^

witty_screename January 15 2011, 05:36:12 UTC

I think Meyer outright said at one point that she'd have no sad endings, so I don't think anyone seriously thought she'd off an important character.

Yeah, I've seen that interview. I think it was her pulling an answer to the Breaking Dawn backlash out of her butt.

So many Suethors have to have all their characters live in Happy Land all the time, but I honestly like when characters die/suffer hardships. It makes the story that much more meaningful to me, when the characters can pick themselves back up and learn to accept the hard stuff.

Even so, skipping the climaxes was really bad form.

It's even worse than that; she won't let anything remotely bad happen to her beloveds. Or if she writes herself into a corner and has to write something bad or painful, she just skips it or passes the POV to someone else. Like Bella getting bitten by James, or her pregnancy being told through Jacob's eyes. It's just plain lazy writing and a tell-tale sign of an author whose too obsessed with her characters ( ... )

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