Chapter 24: Child Of Grace - Child Of Hope (Part 3)

[zelda_queen]

ZeldaQueen: Ah yes, I'm sure you all were curious, I ran Holly through a couple of Mary Sue Litmus Tests after her second year. For this one, she got 102. For this one, she got 221. On both of those tests, that amounts to "kill it dead". It seems that unlike wine, Holly does not get better with age

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[white_wolf03]

Between this and the EVIL presence she sensed from Quirrel, I think our dear sueauthor has missed the point and doesn't get that the suspence is what makes the series so good!

[zelda_queen]

It's a point that surprisingly many suethors make. Instead of thinking "Oh, this is a realistic thing that adds drama and suspense", they think "Ha! With my power of hindsight, I think that Harry was an IDIOT to not see what was going on! My character certainly won't be THAT stupid!"

[madamchaos]

And yet, they never manage to stop the worst things from happening. Even though Harry didn't have the benefit of precognition and that was why he got into the intense messes that he did...

Kind of makes them more useless, doesn't it, that they have all this power and yet they still wind up facing the exact same crises.

It occurs to me that a huge part of the mystery of a Girl Who Lived story is actually cut into for PoA. One of the big things going on was that Crouch said Sirius was muttering "He's at Hogwarts" to himself... but if Harry is Holly (or whatever), then Sirius is still muttering "He's at Hogwarts", which means he's not going after the girl. Authors, part of the suspense is already being ruined, why you gotta make it worse?

[zelda_queen]

Oh yeah, there's that!

Well, I'm sure this suethor has some half-baked "twist" planned. There's a boatload of chapters for this year still, so yeah. We'll just have to see.

[anonymous]

All this Maker stuff, you know what it reminds me of? Vertigo's Lucifer.

When he created his own pocket universe, he told its inhabitants to call him "Maker", for some inexplicable reason - I assume he just thought it sounded better than "Creator" and he didn't want to be worshipped as such, because he was BETTER than God. So, for my sanity's sake, I'd like to imagine that this is the Lucifer World's equivalent of Hogwarts, and that he will soon find them and kill them in a fittingly awesome way for abusing his name and trying to steal his spotlight.

And sneering while he does it. Because these characters' pathetic attempt at sneering will fall flat compared to the Devil's - the King of Sneering, Smirking and All Things Smug!

[beacon80]

I keep picturing C-3PO

[beacon80]

I'm a little bit disturbed by the fact that no one seems at all bothered by the fact that Dudley is attracted to his cousin. Never. He's a horrible person for trying to force himself on Holly, sure, but despite her eagerness to look down on people for every possible reason, she never brings up the incest?

Because, in the end, every boy must fall in love with Holly. Draco, Blaise, Ron, Neville, Tom Riddle. Hell, I'm sure Crabbe, Goyle, and Nott are all secretly in love with her, too, but don't want to intrude on Draco and Blaise because they're good little toadies.

[katistrophe]

Is it just me, or do Sirius' eyes sound extremely Stuish? "[T]he most beautiful eyes she had ever seen. They were blue surrounded by rings of pure grey, like sapphires set in silver." Oh gods, what will she do to him?