The Gang: Chapter 4 - The Test (Part 1)

[zelda_queen]

ZeldaQueen: Once again, warnings! This chapter contains a detailed description of a twelve-year-old being strung up and forcibly stripped and tickled, while he makes it clear he doesn't consent!

Comments

[das_mervin]

So, it's not a secret so much as it's a safeword.

[zelda_queen]

Kind of. The difference is that if he gives it, instead of stopping, they'll just do worse things to him. >_<

[chibi_regalli]

Of course they would. This is Neil. Safewords would interfere with his ability to get off on this.

[erikalyndis]

*hmms cheerfully and douses the story in petrol. Stands back. Lights match. Throws on story.*

Problem solved!

[towerstanding]

Right. So. This is disturbing. Shouldn't this sort of shit put Neil on a "To Watch" list? The FBI and other state agencies monitor the internet for child pornography. And that's what this is. I don't know. I just think that Neil is two key strokes away from a nice, cozy cell. And there would be much rejoicing.

[chibi_regalli]

... Sooooo, now we've got the gang of child-rapists who have a ring of cameras set up in the middle of an apparently HUGE tourist destination to watch for kids to wander off and molest, are more organized than some political bodies, and torture their initiates. Of which they have had, what, two so far? Three?

Damn. Say what you will about these sick little fucks, but they're DEDICATED sociopaths.

Ah, Cronus! He'd improve things here. Personally, my favorite Greek mythological child-cannibalizer is Tantalus. It takes a special level of stupid to try and FEED YOUR BUTCHERED SON TO THE GODS for shits and giggles.

[mibamonster]

'Also, is it just me, or does it seem like Neil is describing Benedict in...rather delicate, feminine terms? Um...'
It's not just you, it's what I was thinking, too. Neil, why do you make everything so GODDAMNED CREEPY?!

'Raxis: You know, dumbass, women tend to hit puberty a little later than boys. Best out of five you're gonna see girls at 14 looking like slightly feminine boys still.'
I don't think this is true; here, at least, general thought is that girls hit puberty about two years earlier than boys. I had a B-cup by the time I was twelve, so I can imagine a fourteen-year old having breasts as well.

Oh. My God. When he saw that girl on the monitor and was all, 'OMG WE CAN MOLEST HER RIGHT NOW GUYS!' I literally had to stop reading because I was just too... too... shocked that ANYONE could seriously write that. What was Neil like as a twelve-year-old? What kind of people does he hang out with, that this is his image of the world?

[chibi_regalli]

Do you REALLY want to know? Apart from as a list of names to call the FBI on.

[zelda_queen]

I know development for girls varies, but by this point, Neil really deserves no slack. Just about every 11 and 12-year-old he's written, from HE to this, has had watermelons to rival Dolly Parton, or otherwise have the bodies of supermodels or gorgeous legs/asses/whatever. I don't think there's a single girl of that age who wasn't described in some sort of fetishy terms.

-_- I wanted to kill him through the computer at that point. And he just doesn't END. Benedict spends the next chapter or so getting tickled-tortured, screaming about how scared he is and how he wants to go home, and as soon as they let him down, he's all "Okay, let's kidnap and molest some girls! 8D" It goes WELL beyond any excuses of him simply being a horny kid, especially since, as Raxis pointed out, he could easily jerk off to something on the internet.