Comments | yinake: Merry holidays everyone! And original fic. ^^;

yinake

Merry holidays everyone! And original fic. ^^;

Dec 30, 2011 00:16

Merry Christmas, and Happy New Year! (Well, we’re almost there, so... it counts, right?). School's out, so I'm just at the beginning of a two month winter break. Most of which will probably be spent sitting on my ass all day playing Skyrim. But, well. Fandom isn't really all that fun for me these days, for various reasons. (Not leaving entirely, ( Read more... )

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Comments 7

transient_words December 30 2011, 00:06:39 UTC

I still ('still' in this case not implying disillusionment or something, since I know how it usually does in a lot of contexts --) that your prose is very good in this. It's something that I tend to pick up more on when reading original, and I think the writing in this is really fluid. I like the metaphors, but I also like the relative simplicity of this: it’s not overloaded. Also, good job on scenery and little details: they’re well described, and not in yer face (you know how I hate that ( ... )

yinake December 30 2011, 11:14:23 UTC

You are much too kind, and you are always such a reliable reviewer. Love you. ♥

robotlove December 30 2011, 10:28:26 UTC

A+

During my reading I had a few different visualizations - all were good. When Zhu stirs and Alistair tenses, it felt as though that scene came straight out of a movie. At most other times, it was very easy to visualize things as though they were rendered Final Fantasy or CLAMP style (idk why my brain did the former, but yeah) OK THE POINT IS the writing flows well enough that everything is playing out like a film, which I always, always consider a good thing.

It also means that I wasn't bored. AND that you've made everything (the setting, and the characters, especially) interesting enough so far that I would willingly go on if this were a book I'd picked up in the library. So now your goal is to make this library book such a good one that I will not only finish reading it, but spend money on the hardcover edition so that I can keep it till I die (Although as you know, I am already biased toward post-apocalyptic settings and generous gay subtext ( ... )

yinake December 30 2011, 10:35:50 UTC

♥ CHARISUU you're amazing. Thanks for reading and reviewing! (It means even more when it's original for some reason).

shirogiku December 30 2011, 12:48:49 UTC

I... waited until everyone left long, meaningful reviews, so I'll have an excuse to be less coherent.

I agree that the visuals are stunning and very cinematic. I'm biased towards Zhu, because hhng how you painted those eyes.

The tension is excellently handled. Even knowing that Alistair wouldn't kill him doesn't lessen the impact.

I liked the hopeful note in the last part.

This is a very, very promising verse. Much better than some fantasy novels I'd been picking up to read and I say that as someone whose favourite genre is fantasy.

Merry Christmas, and Happy New Year to you too!

yinake January 1 2012, 04:51:57 UTC

Eye descriptions are one of my favorite things to write. XD And physical descriptions of people in general. It easily seems overdone in most types of fiction, but here I have the excuse that the way Zhu's eyes change is actually plot-relevant, haha.

I'm glad you like your verse!

fleshisyummy December 31 2011, 03:12:58 UTC

Okay, I so, so want to see more of this. I rarely read unpublished original fic for fun, but this just seems so interesting. I'm not really a big fantasy reader, but I like this verse you've created. You got right to the characters and dialogue, and the interactions between the characters was very engaging ( ... )