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Week one, challenge two-four: Untitled

Aug 03, 2013 21:13

Title: Untitled
Pairing: Yixing/Sehun, side Jongin/Lu Han (onesided Yixing/Lu Han & Jongin/Sehun)
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Romance, angst, friendship
Length: 2810 words
Summary/Warnings: Drunken kisses can end up in way more than that.
23. Write a pairing you've never written before

( “I think I might fall in love with you, if things keep going like this.” )

pairing: kai/luhan, author: sheisjoanne, length: one-shot, rating: pg-13, pairing: luhan/lay, !fanfic, pairing: kai/sehun, genre: fluff, genre: angst, week 2, genre: romance, pairing: lay/sehun

Comments 2

kfangirl4 August 3 2013, 20:41:49 UTC

Thank you for writing this. It wasn't a pairing I've ever seen before but it worked out really well.

gokulex59 August 20 2013, 23:34:24 UTC

I liked it in general. It's good to see they got over their unrequited crushes. It was sorta saddening, ya kno.

Though, I have a few complaints. I am aware I barely write half as good as this, and my flow is a lot worse than it of course; but, I just wanna ask, did you rush this one? Because, although I really understood characters, I often found myself thinking 'well, that escalated quickly'. I don't mean the events, they are at great pace; but the emotions kinda seemed like 'oh, gotta add that too because they have to fall for each other'. I do not mean to offend you in any way and I do like and read your other works, but this is my thought solely about this shot. Just to be honest.