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week 2 / challenge 1

Aug 01, 2013 00:03

Day of Challenge: week 2 / day 1&2
Title: A Knight In Shining Armor
Pairing: Jongin/Luhan
Rating: G
Genre: Romance [au]
Length: 1081 words
Summary/Warnings:

[prompt 14: write a fic where the whole thing is a flashback]

( Luhan was on his way to his parents’ when his car broke down. )

pairing: jongin/luhan, week 2, genre: romance, rating: g, length: one-shot, !fanfic, author: ifancycrush

Comments 3

kfangirl4 August 1 2013, 03:01:25 UTC

You did just fine it was a lovely story.

ifancycrush August 1 2013, 17:07:55 UTC

Thank you! ^-^

anonymous August 15 2013, 07:59:48 UTC

i like the 'premise' of the story; the plot, characters, etc.. but felt like there wasn't much to read about? i feel there should be more figurative language, maybe, or even varying sentence lengths..
i think the language (as in the tone/style) was too .. blank? empty?