Devil Ride 55B/57

Mar 03, 2011 18:51

Title: Devil Ride ( Read more... )

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xenalvr March 8 2011, 00:23:28 UTC
thank you! :-D

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bsofthewest March 3 2011, 13:19:47 UTC
I love this sleepy, half in the dark and half tingling with potential sex, talk. So well written. Sorry you are sick, but you can't tell it from your words.

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laniecroft March 3 2011, 16:01:24 UTC
Hey there, I found wifi :D here in Laos. They have it almost everywhere but I haven't hadn't time to review until now. Too much to see and do around here.
Awesome chapter, love this have awake sleep talk, very sexy and serious at the same time. It is great that even after the short time they know each other, they both are not prepared to live without the other one, can it get anymore romantic than that?

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xenalvr March 3 2011, 16:50:02 UTC
OMG that's so exciting and I'm so jealous! I dowanna be stuck here... grrr...

Canon-Otalia history aside, is it unrealistic that they feel this much for each other this soon? :/

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bsofthewest March 7 2011, 16:17:11 UTC
Fuck canon...this is your world, an a you are doing them proud.

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xenalvr March 8 2011, 00:22:03 UTC
I get that, that's why I'm asking if it's unrealistic that they feel this much for each other this soon when they don't have the background that canon-otalia has ;p

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korenap March 3 2011, 19:08:07 UTC
very very nice. Glad you took your time on it (relatively speaking) great way to give a sense of what Natalia's had to overcome and bring her to being able to move forward and deeper into the relationship than she's allowed herself to feel she deserves.

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xenalvr March 8 2011, 00:22:39 UTC
thanks! I'm kinda glad I took the time to write Natalia's thought process too :-) Not too draggy?

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korenap March 8 2011, 04:03:52 UTC
Not too draggy. You have to bring them to the end and make it feel satisfying. That means bringing the characters to a big conclusion and pause. After the action and secrecy what's in her head was good and a welcome pace change.

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psychomonkey_29 March 4 2011, 02:59:09 UTC
I think I got a cavity with this chapter, so sweet! Love the story but sad that there are only two chapters too go.

Eagerly awaiting the next update!

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xenalvr March 8 2011, 00:23:07 UTC
*grin* awesome! So glad you enjoyed the update. I was thinking that after all the action, anything else will seem dull in comparison... :p

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