My Water Disaster

Jun 11, 2007 16:59

Fandom: Scrubs
Title: My Water Disaster
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nighthawkms June 12 2007, 02:56:18 UTC
Pretty good, but spelling/grammatical errors and a bit of stunted dialogue pulled me out of it. Interesting premise. The ending kinda of seems rushed and I have no idea what you mean by the last line. If you're trying to be metaphorical, it's not clicking. Dr. Cox was characterized very well throughout the fic; very consistent. I suggest a beta for your next fic, since it alway helps to have a second set of fresh eyes on something. *thumbs up* Hope you take what I've said into consideration, thanks :)

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payoffpitch June 12 2007, 03:39:40 UTC
I love how we always have the same opinions on stories. :)

OP, nighthawkms is right on all counts. There are some grammatical errors, including several run-ons followed by fragments. I would be willing to beta for you; I have my degree in Commucations/English.

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xemo_chick June 12 2007, 03:47:17 UTC
Could you please? That would be great!

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payoffpitch June 12 2007, 03:54:40 UTC
No problem. My e-mail is Lucyfire24 at yahoo dot com

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mcmuffins_js June 13 2007, 02:26:04 UTC
Nicely done! I agree about the grammar/spelling, but that's pretty common in Scrubs fic, so... Anyway, I did enjoy this, but just one thing that kind of threw me: Dr. Cox, a man of few words? Hmmmm...

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payoffpitch June 13 2007, 02:33:57 UTC
LOL I betaed it already! Thanks a lot! LOL (The grammar/spelling comments were made last night the first time she posted it and prior to my proofreading)

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mcmuffins_js June 13 2007, 03:51:09 UTC
heh, no disrespect intended... I really, really try to ignore that stuff when I read Scrubs fic, but when other people comment on it, I feel ok about it ;) Anyway, still thrown by Dr. Cox as a man of few words, but enjoyed the story :)

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xemo_chick June 13 2007, 03:59:03 UTC
Lol I changed that sentence. I meant that he is a man of few words when it came to emotional stuff. Hehe, but maybe thats wrong of me to assume :P

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payoffpitch June 13 2007, 02:36:15 UTC
Hey, chica. I loved being able to proofread it, but I didn't proofread this entire story, so please don't give me credit for the whole thing. Your second section has many of the same problems, and I would have been willing to beta that, as well.

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payoffpitch June 13 2007, 02:39:06 UTC
AND, you reversed where I corrected your "your/you're" error.: ("It's o.k, your ok.." ) Honestly, I don't mean to be a bitch about the whole thing, but if you're going to ask me to beta something for you, don't change my corrections and add things that are un'beta'd. It makes me look like I don't know my own grammar rules.

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xemo_chick June 13 2007, 03:13:10 UTC
Oh i'm sorry. That was the one single thing I changed. :) But yea I'll edit and let everyone know that you didn't beta the entire thing. Srry. =]

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payoffpitch June 13 2007, 03:25:57 UTC
LOL it's ok. Let me know if you want me to fix the rest of it.

As a good rule of thumb: "your" denotes possession, and "you're" is a contraction of "you are." A good way to remember this is to replace the word "you are" for the word in your head; if it still works, use "you're."

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xemo_chick June 13 2007, 03:20:28 UTC
Actually, would you beta the rest? I probably should have asked before I posted it.

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