Pretty good, but spelling/grammatical errors and a bit of stunted dialogue pulled me out of it. Interesting premise. The ending kinda of seems rushed and I have no idea what you mean by the last line. If you're trying to be metaphorical, it's not clicking. Dr. Cox was characterized very well throughout the fic; very consistent. I suggest a beta for your next fic, since it alway helps to have a second set of fresh eyes on something. *thumbs up* Hope you take what I've said into consideration, thanks :)
I love how we always have the same opinions on stories. :)
OP, nighthawkms is right on all counts. There are some grammatical errors, including several run-ons followed by fragments. I would be willing to beta for you; I have my degree in Commucations/English.
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OP, nighthawkms is right on all counts. There are some grammatical errors, including several run-ons followed by fragments. I would be willing to beta for you; I have my degree in Commucations/English.
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