Hello. I did Prose Prompt #29. It's late, I know (sorry), but I did time myself, and it took about an hour. Just to clarify, I'm not trying to be all sexist. This was meant to show how much teen angst a girl could feel within like 3 minutes. I wasn't really sure how to go about making it clear that her thoughts were thoughts. Was using quotation
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Using different 'characters' to represent contrasting perspectives is a good technique, but I don't think the line of demarcation is clearly defined in this example.
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though, i agree the delineation between agressive and demure thought patterns isn't striking. however, that can't really be altered by pagination, it's an authorial issue. i didn't want to rewrite her flash-fic in my style - just insinuate what might be possible with a different outlook
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and can someone please explain exactly what "stream of conciousness" is to me?
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I think the end came too suddenly. While, yes, teenage girls' emotions do float all over the place and change in a whim, I just didn't believe it when it happened to her.
I think maybe your character may need more fleshing out, and maybe that will change the feelings I'm having right now about it.
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