Comments | wmhs100: It Wasn't Fair

proud_artie in wmhs100

It Wasn't Fair - Artie/OC

Apr 24, 2010 09:53

Title: It Wasn't Fair
Author: proud_artie, also known as gigundoly
Characters: Artie/OC
Challenge: Fair
Rating: G
Notes: Closer to 150 words; I couldn't bear to cut it down ( Read more... )

author: proud_artie, rating: g, challenge: fair, character: artie abrams

Comments 5

joymaro April 24 2010, 15:02:12 UTC

Wow.

Very good. Very moving!

reetinkerbell April 24 2010, 19:08:17 UTC

Sad, but very good. I like it.

mrtoulouse April 24 2010, 20:02:45 UTC

Oh, chills. That's so sad. But in a good way.

alter_alterego April 25 2010, 03:18:41 UTC

Oh... that was quietly devestating. The parallel sentence structure here really worked: you see where it's going, but you can't stop it, and it doesn't hurt any less by the time you reach the final comparison. Well written.

aspiring_prole April 26 2010, 11:20:31 UTC

Oh! That was very well written. Heartbreaking and effective.