New Fic: The Sentinel: Hate Has No Place For Thursday Challenge

[willow_fae_20]

Title: Hate has no place here

Comments

[bumpkin_is]

Egads... ::blinks:: Okay that is a disturbing case scenario for sure and yeah, I can see it engendering that kind of emotion. Whew!

[willow_fae_20]

I'm not even 100% sure where it came from. I opened a word doc. put the prompt at the top and left it there for couple hours then all of a sudden this popped into my brain and in something like 25 minutes it was posted.

Thanks for commenting.

[betagoddess]

Children being hurt is one of the very few things that can make me that angry. Well done.

[willow_fae_20]

Thanks for taking the time to comment. I feel bad that my story is the first one up for this challenge and it's so hard hitting. But then when the challenge is 'Hate' it's to be expected.

Abused/killed children make my heart ache in way's that are impossible to put on 'paper'.

[betagoddess]

I can't even begin to describe how this subject makes me feel.

So much emotion put into so few words. Not an easy task and you succeeded at it.

[willow_fae_20]

That is a very evocative icon. It looks like something that would be found near a child's grave.

I'm glad the emotion came through right. I'm always worried that my descriptions are either 'too much' or 'not enough'. But with this it was completely from the heart/gut.

[pattrose]

Oh how sad and I think this is exactly the way Blair and Jim would handle it. Great job, I really liked it.

Hugs, Patt

[willow_fae_20]

Oh I'm so glad this seemed in character to you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[laurie_ky]

Hate would feel heavy to Blair, I think, and Jim did good for his partner. No need for apologies because of your hard hitting words. They rang true and hate isn't a light emotion or easy.
I liked this and having Blair relate his current emotions to what he felt abut the candy bar story was good. I imagine he felt guilt and self-hatred for letting himself be influenced to do something he felt was wrong when he shoplifted and having him eat the stolen candy bar ties in the hatred feelings with physical in-the-gut sensations. I like the connection between the emotional and physical, a yin-yang kind of thing, that is a sub-theme expressed in just a few words, and carried out all the way to Jim's physical handling of Blair's body to help him expell the hatred.
Laurie

[willow_fae_20]

Oh, thank you for such in-depth feedback. I'm glad you were able to pull so much from this. Even though it was under 300 words I thought it did a good job of expressing the emotion I wanted it to.

[sc_fossil]

very emotional. nicely done. thanks.

[willow_fae_20]

Thank you for taking the time to comment.