Devil's in the details- Week 1 of Brigit's Flame

[wierdauntie]

             Sukey bent over the heavy cream satin, squinting in the dim light of the lantern. Her dark fingers plied the needle swiftly, in and out, in and out, stitching the rolled edge of a hundred feet of train. Under her breath she chanted the magik song, soft rolling syllables whose meaning was lost but power remained.

She

Comments

[taste_is_sweet]

Wow. :)

Took me a while to understand exactly what was going on, though--initially I thought that the dress was meant for the future wedding of Sukey's child, and that it seemed extremely harsh punishment for an innocent victim. After I read it again I understood that she was making the wedding dress for her master's wife, and all became clear. Though I don't think the wife necessarily deserves the punishment either, though I understand that she won't be the only one suffering the lack of a child, and that the irony of the man's only child belonging to a slave and that he therefore can't acknowledge it will be painful indeed. Well done. :)

[wierdauntie]

Thank you for the second read and thoughtfulness it took. I hope it wasn't too confusing!

[maniccartoonist]

Ooh, I love the sinister aire that this piece ends with. Something that seemed perfectly innocent and sweet turns out to be nothing of the sort. Well done! I also appriciate the breivity of it- just long enough to tell the story.

[wierdauntie]

thank you...!

[therealferret]

If he paid for it with blood, how is
A) He still alive to get married and
B) Sukey still alive to make the dress?

[wierdauntie]

Sukey paid in blood- her hymen.
She is cursing her master's fiancee with barrenness and her master with an only child= a slave he can't acknowledge. maybe takes a second read :)

[therealferret]

Oh, I see, I read it as him paying for it in blood somehow. A slave child really doesnt seem like that much a punishment, doesnt seem like he would care. But I am nitpicking, I really did like this

[agent_diamond]

I LOVE THIS.

It made sense to me right away. In fact, I can relate to Sukey.

Definitely voting for this.

[wierdauntie]

THANK YOU!!!!!

[katden]

OOOOOOOOOO.....I like!
You've raised my curiosity about Sukey!

[wierdauntie]

Yes she has a long cold revenge...