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[nextup_charlie]

in the words you are fading (the aftermath of one-night-stands).
pg-13. patrick/pete.
I don't know how this sounds, I'm just posting it because I know that if I re-read it, I'll hate it, haha. so tell me if you like it or not!

Comments

[sharon_hate]

I noticed some typos, but nothing too major. Just run it through a spell-check and it's all good.

Besides that, though, this was pretty excellent. I love the thought of Patrick fleeing. It's an amazing mental image. His voice throughout this was pretty righteous, I admit.

[focusfixated]

As mentioned before, the typos were a little distracting, but asides from that, this was sincerely enjoyable. You had some lovely poetic phrases in there and the characterisations of the two were most entertaining to read. :D

[theunheardmusic]

"Guiltily, he looks at the Honda key ring in his hand, which he has been doing stress-squeezes on so much since he had taken them out of his pocket that his hand could have been hired by the car company as an advertisement."

that line really made me laugh. the whole inner monologue works really well.

[t_boo]

I am WAY late to the party, but....I LOVE this fic!!! Loooooooooooooove it. I was lol'ing...literally...laughing out loud at...

"Patrick's broken his hip. Oh god, he's cracked his hip bone into seventy different pieces and now he can't sit in his computer chair for hours on end, oh god."

Mostly, because that would be my thought if I broke my hip..."OMG, the humanity!!! I can't sit in at my computer all day and all night!" Hehehe...and also, just because it's just hilarious...the whole this is sweet and funny and overall very Pete and Patrick!!

So there...I'm late, but I bring compliments!