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[nextup_charlie]

in the words you are fading (the aftermath of one-night-stands).
pg-13. patrick/pete.
I don't know how this sounds, I'm just posting it because I know that if I re-read it, I'll hate it, haha. so tell me if you like it or not!

Comments

[lafeelivresque]

Oh, totally awesome. So very Patrick, the silly little sweetheart. I lol'd far too hard at this: don't you do this to me, stupid, or I'll bite you.
Maybe it could do with a brief run past a beta and a few slight edits, but for something you can't bear to re-read, I'd say that's pretty damn brilliant. Kudos!

[nextup_charlie]

everything I write could do with slight edits, but alas, I'm still
here, aren't I? lol. and I can totally picture Pete biting someone.
actually, it's slight odd how WELL I can picture that. O_O
I never like to re-read my own stuff, because I'm one of those people
that INSTANTLY wants to chage it, y'know? but thank you SOOOOOO much
for reading this! comments never fail to make me feel better! <333

[cutsyou]

The song choice was a perfect start up. Then I just couldn't stop laughing at poor sweet little Patrick. And of course loving every second of it. This was great honestly.

[nextup_charlie]

thank you so much, I never have a clue what to say after that, haha <3 I tried to set the mood with the BTE lyrics, I was really starting this with a sad intent, but I just kept writing and I couldn't stop, so it came out a bit humourous :) I never think anything I write is great, so that makes me feel just fantastic!

[vanilla_alia]

oh boy! i really loved the whole tone and pace of this! i loved how patrick second guesses everything like it's his job and lovely and caring pete setting him right. i also really liked how this piece moved. it didn't feel like you stalled at any point in the writing. and the last lines are so pete and patrick. you captured them perfectly. :) nice job on this! loved it

[nextup_charlie]

lemme say that jwalk is ten times more sexier in your icon than EVER. *pants*
Usually I get stalls and pauses in my writing if I go fast like I did on this one,
so I'm really surprised at how it turned out <3 thank you so much, love!
believe it or not, those two lines were not even in my copy of it; I looked at it
and thought it was missing something, then I added those two lines at the end,
do you think it really wrapped it up? :D this is such an amazing comment,
thank you so much love!

[betexxnoire]

these Honda Hybrids should be heart-proof, because Pete's is now stewing in the plastic-y air inside Patrick's car.

Oh, oh! This is the point where my heart broke, thank you very much.

don't you do this to me, stupid, or I'll bite you.

This was a lovely piece and I'm very glad you posted it!

[nextup_charlie]

I think that's one of my favorite lines, I didn't know if it would come off as cliche or icky
so thank you sooo much for that! *tapes heart back together*
haha, can't you just see Patrick breaking up with Pete, and then Pete bites him? :D
thank you so much, that feela really good to hear! I'll definately be posting again,
I have something else that's ready to post, but I just can't find the prompt, heehee. <3

[xxdance]

which constitutes a de ja vu series of events that makes Patrick suddenly really despise The Cure.

DON'T YOU LOVE IT WHEN THINGS IN FIC REMIND YOU OF REAL LIFE

ONLY THE CURE = DAMIEN RICE IN MY CASE. >:o