[lj idol] week two | "you don't want to hold on too tightly now..."

[waltzmatildah]

Count to ten: one, two, three, four-
And I’m still holding my breath.
Because this is not how it goes…"

- - - I look up; my hair tangles in my eyelashes and I don’t bother to swipe it clear. I think I enjoy the view better like this

Comments

[whipchick]

You really capture the blankness of mourning, and how it's an absence that still suffocates.

[waltzmatildah]

Thank you so much for the lovely comment.

[kagomeshuko]

Sad, but a very different type of sad than mine.

[waltzmatildah]

Thank you so much for reading :)

[eternal_ot]

Aww..:/ made me sad....could actually feel the pain..well written!

[waltzmatildah]

Thank you!! But also, sorry for making you sad :(

(but also, yay, because, well, that was the intention so...)

Mostly... THANK YOU!

[rswndrlst]

Ouch.

Funerals can be surreal. The hint that perhaps this wasn't sudden doesn't make it any easier. Such strong emotions in such few words. Good job there.

On a lighter note, I like that I knew what part of the world this was taking place in by the mention of Summer in November.

[waltzmatildah]

Thank you, I'm glad it worked for you and that some of the smaller things came across.

And yep, southern hemisphere. Speaking of: winter is coming. And not just in a Game of Thrones sense. Unfortunately :(

[cheshire23]

The black wedge shoes were such a vivid detail.

[waltzmatildah]

Thank you! I'm glad that worked :)