[lj idol] week two | "you don't want to hold on too tightly now..."

[waltzmatildah]

Count to ten: one, two, three, four-
And I’m still holding my breath.
Because this is not how it goes…"

- - - I look up; my hair tangles in my eyelashes and I don’t bother to swipe it clear. I think I enjoy the view better like this

Comments

[waltzmatildah]

the only thing I can manage is that I really love this. This is more than enough! Thank you so much for reading and commenting :)

[halfshellvenus]

This is beautiful, and the reader is pulled right in to the inescapable sorrow of what the narrator must go through-- no matter how terrible or disorienting, and no matter how much she wishes she didn't have to.

[waltzmatildah]

Thank you so much!! I'm really nervous about my 'style' because I know it can get a bit heavy sometimes (the short piece format of this challenge works in my favour though, I think), so I'm glad that this worked for you. Phew!!

[faerie_spark]

Such vivid imagery, both of nature and of human emotion!

[waltzmatildah]

Thank you so much!! It's exciting to hear that the imagery is working. Yay!

[onda_bianca]

Sad but beautifully written.

[waltzmatildah]

Thank you!

[solstice_singer]

I'm curious. Where did our character go when the ground upened up?

[waltzmatildah]

I'm curious, too! Well, I have a couple of ideas, it really depends on two things:

1) what the next prompt is
2) how brave I am...!

I have grand illusions of some kind of magical realism type... something, only, I'm not convinced I could pull it off.