To Be Noticed (1/1)

[wakingnitemarex]

Title: To Be Noticed
Author: wakingnitemarex / hatemetoday_xx
Rating/Warning: NC-17 and dub!con that is possibly closer to some form of sexual assault
Pairing: Cohnstro
Disclaimer: If this isn't fiction, I will cry.
Summary: Jason Castro is the insecure boy who just wants his roommates to like him. Michael and David are the roommates who are just sick enough to take advantage

Comments

[nsaphrodite]

there ought be more jason sex slave fics out there for everyone to enjoy. great job.

[wakingnitemarex]

I agree. Even if that makes me a terrible person.

Thanks <3

[x_skylines]

I'm going to have to agree with 'allowedtobesad' on this one.

It was a little...awkward.
In a way it was good, but in a way strange.

I was expecting a little more throughout the fic, and when I got to the end I was like, "Ah, I must go comment!" like I normally am with your stuff, I was a little more like, "...Huh."

It's an allover 2.6 out of 5 for me.

(Again, don't hate me. >.>)

[wakingnitemarex]

Thanks for the feedback, hun.

I agree. It did turn out really awkwardly, makes me wish I would've re-written the ending. Hopefully my next posts will be back to the good quality fics you like. <3

Well, at least a 52 is a pass. XD

(I won't hate you! no worries. I know this was not my best work at all. sucks because I think the idea could've produced something awesome..)

[elenauial]

Hmmm. I'm really conflicted on this. I believe some parts of it and then some parts of it seem to stick out and not really make sense. I honestly could believe that Michael and David thought that they were doing it for Jason's own good, but I can't see them being apologetic about it then. I think you have to choose, are they sorry for doing it or are they convinced that it was the right thing for Jason and therefore unapologetic

[wakingnitemarex]

I guess that's maybe just my soft heart creeping in. I just have this theroy that if Jason Castro cries, everyone in the room would be crushed. He's too pretty to cry. ^^;
They're not sorry for doing it, just sorry to make him cry. They were probably hoping to by-step that phase.

Yeah, I think I did mess up a bit with making Michael turn like that..

I.. know more about that kind of situation than I like to admit.

Thanks, bb. Hopefully the next thing I write will be more like my good stuff. :]

[flux88]

If Jason wasn't so darn cute, we wouldn't have this problem of abusing him so much.

In all seriousness though, I was definitely intrigued about how you were going to pull the ending off. I don't think it was too unrealistic, but something was off. Maybe it was Michael's character change or the reasoning, I'm not sure. The fic was still good though, very thought provoking and anything that provokes me to think (and everyone else) can't be that bad.

Great job on this though. I liked it in a sick!hot sort of way, which makes me horrible I know.

[wakingnitemarex]

Why must be be so abusable cute?!

I'm starting to think that it's not so much the ending because unrealistic, because things like that happen a lot. But people are right, there's still something off, and I think they're also right. It's probably Michael's personality turn.

Thanks, bb!
Awww, we can all be horrible together. XD;

[rinnuninnu]

Hot cohnstro-stuff bb!=)

[wakingnitemarex]

Thanks, hun. <3