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vydinh616

Sudden and Complicated 6

Oct 12, 2008 12:46

AUTHOR: vydinh616 (me)
GENRE: Romance + Pathetic Attempt at Comedy
RATING: G
PAIRINGS/CHARACTERS: Arioka Daiki x Original Character x Okamoto Keito
SUMMARY: What happens after a collision with a foreign exchange student he meets on the train? Who knows. But it's bound to be crazy.

“My phone?” She spoke, but in the only language she knew, English.

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original character, hey! say! jump, fanfic, okamoto keito, sudden and complicated, arioka daiki

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vydinh616 October 11 2008, 20:27:45 UTC

xD Thanks!!
I really wanted to get Keito some attention,
but after I thought about it, I kinda wished that one of them had been Inoo instead, cause I havent found one with Inoo and a female character yet. He's always been paired with Hikaru or one of the other boys (makes him look like a girl). I'd like to see him as a guy for once. xD

yamada_love October 11 2008, 20:37:44 UTC

I love this chapter!!
Cant wait for the next chapter!!~
♥

angc106 October 11 2008, 22:57:10 UTC

I love the part where Keito has to translate!!
Keito really needs more attentions...

vydinh616 October 12 2008, 03:38:32 UTC

I agree. Keito has a great personality but we rarely have a chance to see it. I adored listening to him on the radio, you just learn so much!

eemir_eera October 12 2008, 01:11:37 UTC

hehe..Keito!!!!....Aah....*jumping around*...Sugoii...i'm glad u also included keito in this chapter...Arigatou na...^_^...BTW,good chapter...

“I didn’t do it!” Inoo justified. “Wait, what didn’t I do?”

haha..cute...i love to see inoo saying this...
She lowered her head in a bow, trying to show sincerity as well as cover up her bright red face.

haha...sure..i bet her face will become so red and hot...haha....

vydinh616 October 12 2008, 03:37:39 UTC

xD I had fun with Inoo. I loved seeing him say that in my head. So cute~ :3

faiasakura October 12 2008, 01:12:48 UTC

Oh, a love triangle, how lovely! lolz...

Um...it's hard to read with the type of formatting you have, could you put spaces between paragraphs so it's just one big block of text?

vydinh616 October 12 2008, 03:37:00 UTC

Spaces between paragraphs? I tried that once but it took up a lot of space. Maybe I'm thinking of something different. Care to show me an example?

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vydinh616 October 12 2008, 21:20:35 UTC

So you want me to do that for the whole thing? or just dialog? I'm willing to post my next chapter like that if you wish. ^^

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