Reasons Unknown, Part 2

[visiblemarket]

Title: Reasons Unknown, Part 2
Fandom: Heroes
Pairing: Plaude
Rating: PG13
Disclaimer: Not mine. At all.

Part 1

Comments

[lotus0kid]

Yay, more story! Still love the time-jump structure, and I really like all the little Petrelli family details, they're all great. I love that Peter sees Claude first.. um, I'm not entirely sure why.

Peter felt a little less guilty about how totally trashed he must look at the moment, but hey, at least some of the pictures were going to be interesting.
*snerk* Attaboy, Pete. ;D

But that was the thing, wasn’t it? He was easy to miss, and that’s what Peter had been doing. Missing someone he didn’t really have the right to miss.
That's a clever bit, right there. Aww, poor baby.

I really hope you finish up the next part soon, I'm dying to see Claude's reaction to Peter the Laundry Delivery Boy.

[visiblemarket]

I love that Peter sees Claude first.. um, I'm not entirely sure why.

Because it's...an important little detail...maybe.

That's a clever bit, right there. Aww, poor baby.

Clever, huh? I felt a...little obvious going there. But Peter's a bit obvious so, it felt right. Ish.

I really hope you finish up the next part soon, I'm dying to see Claude's reaction to Peter the Laundry Delivery Boy.

Hee. Well, it's written. I'll probably just post it before I go to work, but I need a while to get out of writing mode and into editing mode.

Thanks for reading!

[lotus0kid]

Because it's...an important little detail...maybe.
Ooh- Claude's invisible, isn't he? Oh boy, intrigue!

I felt a...little obvious going there. But Peter's a bit obvious so, it felt right. Ish.
I think it's a fun bit of wordplay, kinda. In any case, yes, especially at that age, I'd say Peter's not too big on subtlety.

Well, it's written. I'll probably just post it before I go to work
Woohoo! *airpunch*

[visiblemarket]

Ooh- Claude's invisible, isn't he? Oh boy, intrigue!

*wink* Maybe...

I think it's a fun bit of wordplay, kinda. In any case, yes, especially at that age, I'd say Peter's not too big on subtlety.

Peter's just very, very confused. It's not his fault.

Woohoo! *airpunch*

*airpunch*! Indeed.

[trippypeas]

"“Nathan seemed really happy,” he half-smiled, and wondered at how just about everyone in his family had mastered partial expressions. "

*laughs*

[visiblemarket]

*laughs with you* Thanks!

[kiltfriction]

And you thought you weren't going to write limo porn, now look at what you've spawned!

...the gait that seemed confident and cool and collected and just perfect, for wherever he was, for whatever he was doing.

What he was doing, as far as Peter could tell, was concentrating on something, head down, tongue poking out between his lips. .

Love that bit, just a little glimpse of unguarded Claude caught up in his own world, very cute. (Pre-I Hate the World world, obviously.).

[visiblemarket]

And you thought you weren't going to write limo porn, now look at what you've spawned!

*sigh* You all are just so pushy...;) I just really enjoyed writing the limo porn, I'll admit.

Love that bit, just a little glimpse of unguarded Claude caught up in his own world, very cute. (Pre-I Hate the World world, obviously.).

Unguarded, pre-I Hate the World Claude is just so very sweet. In that he's still guarded in his own way, but still so much more open to some things.

Thank you!

[indyhat]

Stumbled to the kitchen, to cereal and milk and fruit he didn’t really like but couldn’t bear not to eat, because it’d been set out for him.

There are lots of really nice little character notes in this. I like it :)

[visiblemarket]

Thank you! I'm...always a bit reluctant to go too far into that sort of thing, I feel like I'm being a little too obvious about my opinions on Peter and his character. I mean...I do try not to hit people over the head with "oh, he is so very nice and sweet and doesn't want to offend anyone".

[indyhat]

Well, sometimes I think you've just got to go for it ;)