Gasoline, BANG BANG~, prologue

[dorox]

Title: Gasoline, BANG BANG~
Chapter: 0/? (~5-7)
Rating: PG-13
Focus/Pairing: kinda~Jonghyun!centric; Pairings/Couples will be introduced/develope in the next chapters.
Appearances: Jonghyun; UPCOMING! (tell me who to put in! XD)
Genre: Action; Humor?; Crossover (Upcoming: Romance, Angst, Fluff ...)
Words: 637
Warning: Mention of a gun.

Comments

[crazyoverbishie]

S.P.O.T!!!

*reads*

[dorox]

You almost-NINJA! :D

[crazyoverbishie]

well...thx to you^^\
XD

[crazyoverbishie]

He was clad in a black wifebeater and dungarees to avoid getting too dirty.

O.....M....G... *teary eyed*
*faints*

Any normal girl, maybe even boy, would pay him at least a second look. Jonghyun had unnatural large eyes, sharp features, a defined jaw and despite his lacking height, he still was handsome. Work made him having defined muscles.

i wont tear my eyes off of him...DAMN!!!!!!  YOU MENTIONED ALMOST EVERYTHING THAT GOT ME INTO HIM BADLY.....>.WHAT THE....DAMN!!! YOU GIRL....I LIKE THIS SOOO EFFING MUCH...YOU EVEN PUT JUNGHEE HERE...OM...MY TWO BIAS.....XXXXXDDDD

[ckat09]

please continue this.:)
i love reading this kind of action, romance thing.^^
just continue it, okay?

[dorox]

I can't promise you anything, unfortunately ...
But of course I'll try my best. I think I'll at least
give it a chance in the first chapter ... :D
Thanks for reading & commenting ♥

[bree_nd]

Recommended by crazyoverbishie

Wow, this storyline sounds really interesting, I don't even!

The only thing that maybe you could improve on would be using usual quotes for dialogue. The arrows thingy kinda distracted me from the actual story and as a result, I had to reread to understand some parts.

On a whole, your English is pretty good. Just remember to proof-read to catch any mistakes you might have missed and maybe get a beta reader as well. :)

I hope to see you continue with this! And if it's not too much to ask, could you inform me should you continue it? Thank you so much! :)

[dorox]

So you're the friend she recommended it to ^^ Nice~ ^^

Really? I like using these kinda individual dialogue puntuations ... But I promise thinking about it, alright? I never knew it could be a disturbance to someone o.o

Thanks for the compliment on my English ^^ Sometimes I forget to proof-read, so well ... And actually, I have a beta, it's just that she's rather busy, and she's rather a content-beta than language-beta. :D

I hope too, that people will be interested. I will at least give it a try with a first chapter, and telling possible couples - that probably will get more attention than what I did here, just saying "Jonghyun-centric" XD
Please anticipate the first chapter of this series around next weekend, or maybe in two weeks. After that, we'll have to see.

Thanks for giving me feedback, and reading of course ♥

[bree_nd]

Yeah... Cause I'm one of the people that's nice (according to her) and willing to read anything (according to me) XD

Oh, you don't have to change it for me if you like it. Another way is that you mention or explain that the words designed/styled as such are the dialogues in the author's note. :)
I'm just anal about English not that I'm perfect but yeah XD

Oh, in that case, get more than one beta reader. One for content, another for language, etc. I understand that different people have different abilities so that's what I do too. Personally, I have more content beta readers cause I naturally edit my own stuff to the best of my ability. And I still continue editing after I posted or after someone comments on a mistake I made. My readers are my beta readers, basically. :)
Though, when I ask, they never wanna say anything mean. It irks me sometimes. XD

When you do try it, I'll gladly promote it for you. One piece of advice that I could give you (this is based on a convo with crazyoverbishie) is that have a plan of the things that you want to make

[dorox]

No, now that you're saying it ... I guess I didn't see this dialogue marks anytime before in English books; I'll think about it, thanks for pointing it out to me ^^

I'm already asking around. The thing is - I'm a bit strange when it comes to beta-readers. I don't want anyone to write the story anew for me, just tell me what's good and what's bad, or what weak points the language has, or what to do better. XD But I'm still new to these things. Before, I only proof-read for myself and others, didn't let another do that for me XDD

Yeah ... plans. The thing is this: I still need to have a lot of freedom or I'll completely lose interest. Why put it on paper for others if I have it already completely for myself? But I have everything in my head, don't worry, at least in this story ^^

I will keep your hints in terms of pairings in mind; I thought of something like that, too. :D

No, they don't. It's actually fresh talking with someone who gives me advices. With me, one can always talk like that. Maybe I sound now totally arrogant, but I

[fabricatedays]

I really like your plot! (:

the italic words really intrigue me to know whats happening there and you should continue because it sounds promising!

And also, it seems as though Jonghyun had family issues? seeing his mother going off with a new boyfriends gives a sad feeling. but oh wells (:

I hope you'll have the muse to continue this.^^

p.s seeing tat jonghyun could be the main character... then JONGYU? XD or onkey. or any onew x member would be awesome. LOL. (just saying though) but i notice your tags having other bands. ^^ so it would be straight couplings right? LOL. so whichever you want and like!

[dorox]

Thanks for reading & commenting ♥

I can only decide if to continue it as a fanfiction after looking if enough people are interested in the story.
Since if there aren't, I prefer writing it as an original story :D:D

Yeah ... well, his mother has changing boyfriends, but she's disappointed with men. I don't think I'm going to spoiler anything with saying that his father 'simply' died a few years ago.

I hope so, too :D I hope enough people pick interest ^^
Jonghyun kind of simply is the main character. I can promise you that I will kind of ... fulfill your wishes.
And it will be both, het! and homo! :D Simply: bi! XD
The tags are only because I thought about writing with them :D