Comments | velvet_mace: PETS Chapter 9

velvet_mace

PETS Chapter 9

Aug 15, 2005 15:03

Unbeta'd. Rough. This chapter is something of a let down from last one's hotness. I suppose that's just the way fics work. Call this the post orgasmic glow. This is a plot chapter, introducing a lot of new (canon) characters into the mix. And I've done what I've never done before. Written consensual canon sex. Amazing. Enjoy it because it ( Read more... )

fma, fma: gracia, fma: hughes, rated: nc-17, fic, pets

Comments 59

sky_dark August 16 2005, 00:47:38 UTC

Omg you wrote het, we may have to take your membership card XD But it was great I don't see why you were sweating it out!

velvet_mace August 16 2005, 02:26:51 UTC

Yeah, yeah, easy for you to say... I found writing this just as hard as writing my first smut. But now that I've gotten past that, I could probably do it again.

Somehow I don't think I'm going to write het that often though.

thisisnotmyname August 16 2005, 00:54:06 UTC

ooooohhhh you put archer and kimbley in there.

my eyes glaze over at the smutty possibilities lol

i loved this. hughes' inner turmoil and the introduction of pride was great.

its funny though, in a story about alchemists, there really werent all that many in the military. just roy, armstrong and.. gran i guess. kimbley was in jail and ed doesnt count for this story. you'd think they'd have more developed characters at their disposal?

well anyway, i love archer and i love kimbley and i love you for putting them in this. and the het was good, though i'm disturbed i didnt find it as hot as teh gaysechs (which isnt your fault as a writer at all). you people are just ruining me lol

velvet_mace August 16 2005, 03:21:06 UTC

Weirdly enough it was almost like the army DIDN'T WANT alchemists.

thisisnotmyname August 16 2005, 03:25:37 UTC

i know! except for that one scene in episode 13 where havoc and breda are spying on all the alchemists in the mess hall, there are only a handfull in the actual story.

always bothered me.

/end babble

mikkeneko August 16 2005, 19:15:52 UTC

Scar killed them all. :D

ahwanos August 16 2005, 02:23:23 UTC

Mmmmm, plot. I can't wait for the next chapter.

If you haven't noticed, I'm not very good with reviews. T___T But I do enjoy!

velvet_mace August 16 2005, 03:21:27 UTC

You do fine. I'm glad you liked the plot!

ahwanos August 16 2005, 03:24:03 UTC

raveechidna August 16 2005, 03:10:40 UTC

::bows:: You've gone an made it hot....wow thats got to be a first for me. Normally het's not my thing at all. I love how you make it vivid yet at the same time not overly blunt (so its not like reading a technical description of a porno)

velvet_mace August 16 2005, 03:23:30 UTC

I'm not a big het girl myself, so I was pleasantly surprised that I enjoyed writing this... but still given a choice, I prefer my gaysex.

forgottenlover August 16 2005, 04:20:42 UTC

Archer, you brought in your namesake! ::cheers:: now, I'm going to hope that Archer loses control of Kimblee and he goes to the other side, as he sees more opportunity there... ::wills it::

velvet_mace August 16 2005, 18:53:40 UTC

Yep, I have more pairing fodder, though I won't be doing them right away.

I don't know about kimblee going to the other side... I mean, that side is already FREAKING STRONG. Hughes needs some (albeit rather insane) support if the good guys are to win.

forgottenlover August 16 2005, 22:52:26 UTC

I'm thinking keeping the boy to his opportunistic nature... not keeping the good guys in the lead

::snickers:: silly silly soldier