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velvet_mace

Undesirable: Chapter 23

Sep 27, 2009 11:29

TITLE: Undesirable (A vampire novel)
RATING: NC-17 (This chapter PG-13)
SUMMARY: Help finally arrives.
Word Count: 6673

( Chapter 23 )

original, undesirable

Comments 23

charisstoma September 27 2009, 22:29:00 UTC

Call me paranoid but I wouldn't put it past Jeffrey to be playing in this. Diversion so George would do what he does best, run. Set him up to lead him to Vestular. Political hay.
Loved the discussion of vampire politics and social mores. Gregory was 'pricking the condom'. *delight* Oh how cute of him.

velvet_mace October 10 2009, 18:44:47 UTC

Oopsie! I somehow missed this comment! My bad!

Sometimes it's frustrating because the whole pricking the condom thing hints at a section of backstory that there is just no comfortable way of shoehorning into this story.

charisstoma October 10 2009, 21:11:51 UTC

""Sometimes it's frustrating because the whole pricking the condom thing hints at a section of backstory that there is just no comfortable way of shoehorning into this story.""

*GRINS* Some writers do sidestories to the mainstory line. *tries to look innocent*

eve_n_furter October 13 2009, 10:55:16 UTC

The characterization of Jeffrey in the bible made me wonder about that too, but I'm happy either way thanks to Vestalar's obvious potential.

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methosdeb September 27 2009, 23:31:43 UTC

loved it ,I am not sure I trust this guy yet ,they have been thru so much ,I don't know if I would have trusted anyone enough to get into another car with someone .jeffrey is going to be pissed at any rate .

velvet_mace October 10 2009, 18:45:30 UTC

Sorry so late in commenting!

Not trusting Chuck? Aw... well we'll see how trustworthy he turns out to be.

azalea_j September 28 2009, 02:30:51 UTC

Holy shit fast update! *Loveses you*

velvet_mace October 10 2009, 18:45:45 UTC

And I'm extremely slow commenting! My bad!

azalea_j October 10 2009, 21:36:20 UTC

Hahaha! No worries.

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velvet_mace October 10 2009, 18:46:18 UTC

They are! Sorry for taking so long to comment. Next chapter is up btw.

drelfina September 29 2009, 00:42:49 UTC

oh. my. god.

They got away!

THEY GOT AWAY!

Only I am seeing that Chuck's not quite what George thinks he is. He's not all about killing the Vampires, I bet, but he's about doing it stealthy like, not upsetting the status quo, or rather managing it, focussing and directing the resistance so the Vampire society would do stuff the way HE wants it.

.... And him being so nice, and insiduous - he's fucking scary too. Just that he has no Vampire ness ...

Though I keep thinking Chuck's really a renegade vampire.

It's not like George or Wally can tell.

velvet_mace September 29 2009, 01:29:07 UTC

Hee hee hee, I'm not giving away any hints, other than the story isn't over yet.

drelfina September 29 2009, 02:10:59 UTC

It's anALIEN! *flails arms*

But I love this chapter. Not so much harried, but all that "Oh yay relief" going on.

... it's going to get WORSE for poor George.