Convolution

[valhalla37]

Title: Convolution
Characters/Pairings: Daniel/Charlotte; minor Miles, Frank, Naomi, Juliet, Eloise, Richard
Summary: "He's plied his trade in time -- in how it can be shaped and folded; bent, manipulated -- so the irony stabs him, cruel and deep, as he wipes more blood from her chin, of how little they have together left."  Fifty moments between

Comments

[valhalla37]

Awwwww, thank you so much, hon! Your wonderful feedback is so, so appreciated. :D

[tocourtdisaster]

This is so absolutely gorgeous and so incredibly in character and I just love it. Number 28, about their lifelines, was just chilling in how Charlotte dismisses it, but then they both end up dying young. Wonderful, wonderful job. &hearts

[saved29]

Oh God.
Maybe sometime later I will find the words to describe how beautiful, how RIGHT this fic is.
Loved it!

[valhalla37]

Thanks so much! That you took the time to read and then leave feedback is really, really appreciated.

[valhalla37]

Wow, thank you so much! It's such a relief to hear you think they stayed IC -- I was a little worried, considering the million different places I took them here.

"Fortune" is one of my favourites, so thanks again so much for that in particular!

[ozmissage]

This is just beautiful. There's simply no other word to describe it. In fifty sentences you seemed to capture everything that is good and wonderful about this pairing and then draw it out into something rich and vivid and real.

I started making note of all of the sentences I loved the best at the beginning, but I wrote down so many it would be silly to quote them all back to you.

Instead, I'll just say amazing job!

[valhalla37]

Wow, jeeze -- thank you so much!

There were a thousand and one things I thought go could wrong with this -- and though I've seen the format used really effectively, sometimes I'm not totally sold on "numbered" fics -- so I really, truly appreciate your lovely comments. And saying it all seemed "real" is seriously one of the best compliments you could have given, so thanks again for that. :D

[angela_weber]

Oh, goodness. I don't even know where to begin. I mean . . . oh, my. This is unbelievable. Every single sentence is so very powerful, so beautifully worded, so incredibly spot-on. I actually have tears swimming in my eyes. I mean, damn. This fic is like looking at them through a prism: every single side of them, all beautiful, shifting and changing and ephemeral and just so gorgeous. You have made me love this pairing in ways that the show never did; I felt like I was right there with them from the first word to the last. This is such a great balance, the perfect mixture of bitter and sweet, and I want to quote everything at you, but I'm afraid I'll never stop, so let me just say that I am so honored to even be mentioned in conjunction with this fic (which is so nice of you and so unexpected--my hand in this fic was, like, two "good jobs" along the way? ;D). And dude, there was absolutely no need to be nervous! You have more than exceeded my expectations--and they were sky-high. Just fantastic! This is really something to be proud of

[valhalla37]

I'm tearing up at your comment -- thank you so, so, so much, a million times over. I'm so incredibly pleased that it spoke to you, and managed to capture all those different sides and layers and nuances of the pairing -- that's really the key thing I wanted to do with it, to so hear (from you of all people) that was a success is really, really encouraging.

You have made me love this pairing in ways that the show never did. Awwww, thank you for THAT, too -- the beauty of fic, I think, is discovering those new perspectives, because I think it helps us to re-discover the characters, too; it's the same way I feel about your Jack/Kate.

Whatev, you don't give yourself enough credit. ;P There were a couple moments (though I talk about it like it was some epic, months-long thing, when really it was what -- a week or so? LOL) where I totally wanted to abandon it -- or not even start in the first place -- so your encouragement honestly did make a difference. :D

[franza]

Wow, seriously brilliant! these were so beautifully written.
Number 28, 24, 40, 47 and 35 are my top favourites,
Love this line,
"and why he first gripped Charlotte's hand on the Kahana with a sense of finally, you're here -- but he still trips over the knowledge, suddenly, admits it to himself as he strides up the beach with salt clinging to his skin and sees her smile, a beacon of relief guiding him back."

A lot of work must have gone into this, you got it so in character and so realistic, each and everyone read like it should have been in the show!
just excellent
XXX

[valhalla37]

Wow, thank you so, so much! And thanks especially for pointing out which sections you enjoyed most -- as a writer, I adore that kind of feedback because I love to hear what really works for people.

It took a while, I won't lie, but I always have so much fun writing these characters/the pairing. Thanks again for your wonderful, thoughtful comments!