Convolution

[valhalla37]

Title: Convolution
Characters/Pairings: Daniel/Charlotte; minor Miles, Frank, Naomi, Juliet, Eloise, Richard
Summary: "He's plied his trade in time -- in how it can be shaped and folded; bent, manipulated -- so the irony stabs him, cruel and deep, as he wipes more blood from her chin, of how little they have together left."  Fifty moments between

Comments

[elliotsmelliot]

This was beautiful. Of all the Lost couples out there, it just makes so much sense for Dan and Charlotte's story to be told in a tumble of snippets and upside down time. I know your Dan so well, I particularly enjoyed getting more of Charlotte's POV here. It is hard to chose a favourite, but this line really spoke to me, There's everything in front of her and nothing at all; I also liked the scene with Charlotte and who I presume to be Jacob. As always, you prove able to find new and creative ways to show their delicate fierce love.

[valhalla37]

:D

Thank you so, so, so much -- I thought too this format worked well for them, with such a disjointed history and so many blank spots in their relationship already. And wow -- thanks in particular for the comment about Charlotte; I tend to find myself falling into Dan's POV even when I don't mean to, so this was also supposed to be an exercise in trying things from Charlotte's perspective. So I'm really pleased to hear that worked.

Yes! Definitely Jacob ... I still haven't decided what I think the purposeful "touching" from the finale means, but I'd love to see that Jacob interacted with Charlotte as well at some point.

[_badly_drawn_]

This was so gorgeous. The bit about the cereal... well I always wondered if anyone noticed the bit where Charlotte and Dan are oggling the cereal in the background of that one scene. Because I love that random small detail.
All of these were wonderful, also especially loved Dan walking in on Charlotte in the shower. Fantastically in-character, well done.

[valhalla37]

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and leave your thoughts!

And hah -- I definitely noticed that little moment too (I usually play the 'Spot Dan and Charlotte' game during the beach camp scenes whenever I watch my S4 DVDs, haha).

[fifmeister]

So. Awesome. I love the creativity in these, and the perfect mixture of angst and cuteness. I think my favorites are 8, 10 (Charlotte teaching Dan how to do close-quarters combat--now that would be interesting to watch! *g*), 14 and 49, but they're all wonderful.

[valhalla37]

Thank you so much! I'm so, so glad to hear you think there was a good balance between the two; I'm always veering off into angst by accident, but I also didn't want it to be too cutesy. And definitely would have loved to seen that -- I mean, somebody had to teach him to use that gun he had in the beginning of S4, right? ;D

PS: God, I love that icon. <33

[valhalla37]

No, thank you for taking the time to come back to this and then leave such great feedback! It's really, truly appreciated.

I'm so glad that it came across that way -- snippets of moments and bigger stories, but also self-contained. I think the danger in any format like this is having everything too choppy or lackign flow, so I'm really happy to hear that it worked overall for you. :D

[missy_useless]

[I am so late. Sorry.]

First of all: great title.

I love all of these moments you chose and created - this whole fic/collection of scenes is so very well written and definitely part of my personal canon, from now on. Thanks a lot for not giving up on the challenge and sharing this with us.

And now, more details:

1 - So, so sweet … which is the wrong word because well, seasickness is not sweet - but they are so adorable! Aww.
2 - This should have happened. It should have. Your OTP is even more sunken and gone and almost-never-happened than mine is. What a great sentence!
3 - The contrast between them here is so vivid, so painful, and still the connection is there and oh God, Dan.
4 - So fitting and true to the characters. I love that she helps him with his bags.
5 - I think that sentence is one of my favorites. His voice and her patience and oh, I love it. Wonderful!
6 - What a delicate, gentle scene. Lovely.
7 - Oh, Dan.
8 - And again: Oh, Dan. What a beautiful sentence.
9 - Great Charlotte pov. (she settles on neither). *sigh

[valhalla37]

Okay, I know I said you were wonderful before -- and you absolutely were then ;P -- but the levels of your kindness, thoughtfulness and all-around greatness has just defied all description reading this a second time (and not just the quick pass-over I had time for previously).

I ... guh. WOW. That you took the time to read and detail your reactions to every single scene is one of the absolute nicest things anyone has ever done for me (and I'm talking even beyond the scope of LJ or writing stuff). You had me grinning the entire time, because it was like getting 50 separate, lovely reviews all at once!

I'm just in shock, seriously, and awe of how great you are. If I ever need motivation to keep writing -- and god, sometimes I do -- I think I can keep pushing through knowing there are people out there like you who are so willing to give their time to offer such wonderful encouragement.

Thank you, thank you, thank you, a million times over.