Comments | vail_kagami: Pendulum (8/9)

vail_kagami

Pendulum (8/9)

Mar 02, 2009 22:36

Rating: R
Pairing: AU!Master/Doctor (10), Jack/Doctor
Warnings: Dark
Summary: In which the Doctor discovers that not all is lost yet.

The Doctor’s hands were trembling.

They often were, these days. By now he could hardly recall when they hadn’t, but today the trembling was getting worse along with the pain in his head; a dull, insistent throbbing ( Read more... )

medium: story, doctor who era: tenth doctor, fandom: doctor who, * story: pendulum, # series: losing the lifeline

Comments 17

debart March 2 2009, 22:08:11 UTC

Oh! So lovely and lonely the two must be! The last sentence caught me completely. What a wonderful treat to come in from shoveling snow to find this latest chapter done. Thank you!

Deb.

vail_kagami March 3 2009, 16:38:30 UTC

All the snow is gone here (though it might return in April) so the shoveling days are past. Leaves more time for writing.
Thank you the the comment!

edzel2 March 2 2009, 22:20:34 UTC

This is lovley and disturbing all at the same time... :-)

vail_kagami March 3 2009, 16:39:59 UTC

Don't we all love contradictions? :P
Thanks for commenting!

evilawyer March 3 2009, 04:22:24 UTC

Great job conveying the Doctor's pain and turmoil over his situation. And a nice, almost peaceful moment at the end there.

vail_kagami March 3 2009, 16:39:04 UTC

Thank you. I thought a nice, peaceful moment was finally in order.

rose_cat March 3 2009, 05:04:58 UTC

Some hope, even sweetness, in this chapter. (Please tell me the pendulum isn't going to swing all the way back in the last one, though. *crosses fingers*)

God, the poor Doctor. My head is hurting in sympathy. No, empathy. (Do you have experience with migraines as well?)

Maybe he would go insane before the last of his senses was lost, he thought, and realised that the idea didn’t scare him...At some point death had become the best possible outcome.

Ouch. He's so close to resignation and to giving up, to being beyond despair, which is more disturbing than when he was terrified and fighting it. (Again, I hope you don't have much experience in this area.) And then he rallies!

Jack...was still stuck in the I’d Rather Cut Off My Own Leg And Eat It Than Talk To Him phase.

*snork* At least he hasn't lost his sense of humor...

...Jack suspected the TARDIS was arranging her corridors on purpose so that the one the Master was in was always far away from the one Jack was walking down.This made me think of cats in the same household that ( ... )

vail_kagami March 3 2009, 16:42:16 UTC

It's been a while like I heard that tale, I admit I had forgotten it. Looks like being a mermaid really sucks.
I corrected the typos, thanks for pointing them all out! And for the lovely feedback as well.

pherber_m March 3 2009, 07:39:06 UTC

*whimper* I'm very glad to see the Doctor rebounding a bit, even if it does raise my anxiety level about the final chapter.
Is it too late to request an army of cute fluffy kittens to come to the rescue?

vail_kagami March 3 2009, 16:44:11 UTC

I believe the army of cute fluffy kittens got spaced by the Master in a previous fic. Sorry kittens!