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angela_weber in unsteady_ground

LOST - let it be a lie

Sep 09, 2009 20:29

Title: let it be a lie
Rating: High PG-13
Pairing: Jack/Kate
Summary: Repetition is his only constant. He memorizes the address, the room number, her new name--this time he will ask for "Noreen," for "Anna," for "Susan."

Author's Note: For the prompt 'letter' at the Impromptu (im)Promptathon, run by 5_loves : electricity and 30_wounds : Go down in flames. Many thanks ( Read more... )

character: jack shephard, fanfic, rating: pg-13, table: 30_wounds, table: 5_loves, character: kate austen, fanfic: lost, pairing: jack/kate

Comments 23

part one hintofawhisper September 12 2009, 01:54:27 UTC

*jaw hits floor* This is beautiful. This is, without a doubt, one of my favorite fics of yours. I'm loving your LOST AUs more and more; you manage to keep Jack and Kate in character so, so well, and it's fantastic! Now, on to the excerpts:

"Hey," he laughs, taking a breath, nodding, clumsy, ecstatic.

"Missed you," she whispers. He moves his hands a little lower; his wrist brushes against the gun sticking out of the back of her pants, like old times. He swallows. He has never felt more out-of-place or more at home. Her teeth are white, her red lips shivering, smiling and faltering and then smiling again, her hands already at work on his tie.Awww! I SO see them like this, saying these things, his reaction... guh. I love the little things you put here: her hands on his tie, and how he remembers old times from the gun sticking out the back of her pants. This is adorable ( ... )

Re: part one angela_weber September 12 2009, 19:41:39 UTC

Ahhhh! YAY I was totally thinking about you and our ship as I wrote this and so you are entirely to blame for the happier feel. ;) I'm so, so relieved that you liked it! :D :D You flatter me far too much.

I'm so happy that you liked the New York section in particular! The image of them holding hands in the snow is one that I've had in mind for a while and I knew I had to use it, as fluffy and cliche as it is. ;)

Eskimo kissing . . . :D SO self-indulgent of me! But I'm really glad that you liked it! And yeah, the feeling of normalcy as compared to the other locations is kind of jarring, so yay that you enjoyed it! I wanted to give them a moment of peace, however shortlived.

It definitely is a taboo subject, you're right! Craphole Island is just the better setting for them. They can't be normal in the real world because their experiences on the island have scarred them, changed them irrevocably, and I can't imagine any real happiness away from it. I'm happy you liked it! :D

I do know that, and I'm very, very glad. ;)

Re: part one hintofawhisper September 13 2009, 01:23:14 UTC

Aww, really? Then I will happily accept the blame... this fic was gift enough. I don't think I'll ever dislike a Jate fic of yours, haha. Even if the fics are a bit dark and hopeless for them you still manage to keep it honest and true to them. I'm glad I've flattered you. ;D

The New York bit... *happy sigh* Just the image of them like that without the constant angst and longing, and everything else pretty much in their way was a nice one. For them, I don't see it as cliche. Really. :)

Hee, we indulge ourselves quite a lot with our Jate fics, don't we? XD It's something that just can't be helped, I guess. This part does feel jarring in comparison to the others, but in a good way. Unfortunately, a moment of peace between Jate always seems to be a rare occurrence, doesn't it? :/

I agree completely, of course, about the island ultimately being the better place for them. I think it's safe to feel Darlton are aware of this, and we'll see how that comes about in the end. What, only 5-6 months away now? ;)

Good. :D

Re: part one angela_weber September 13 2009, 02:39:08 UTC

Aww! And I'm flattered again! ;D Ditto for your fics, as always!

That is so good to know! :)

Self-indulgent? Uh, yeah, you could say that. ;P I know--they are always caught somewhere between misunderstanding and mistiming. Very sad. :/

I can't believe that it's been four months since the finale. Insanity! ;)

part two hintofawhisper September 12 2009, 01:55:06 UTC

"I love you," he says softly, leaning over her, a shadow on her face, a murmur in her ear. She smiles again and pulls his face down to hers, one hand tapping a silent tune on his shoulder, the other at his waist, simultaneously pulling him closer and pushing him away.

"Go," she tells his five o'clock shadow in a voice too gentle, pressing her lips to that spot on his neck, the one she always comes back to.

He kisses her forehead and wishes she'd said "me too" instead.

Oh, I particularly love this. That's Jack for you: he's so open when it comes to love and Kate, well, she's not. She's still guarded. That last line there is so heartbreaking to me. I can imagine Jack would have that kind of longing thought.

The way you describe their frenzied sex (Kate's idea of comfort, but there you go XD) is great; it's so lyrical, the flow of the words you use are beautiful. There would definitely be times when it would be like this between them-- this desperation.

She laughs to his shoulder, more breath than actual sound. When he finally ( ... )

Re: part two angela_weber September 12 2009, 19:49:11 UTC

I don't know if Jack is particularly open about love, at least in my understanding of him--but yes, compared to Kate almost anything is open, right? I think that this relationship is so hard for them because they don't know how to say all the things they needo to. So they just attack it from the corners and let the heart of it go to waste ( ... )

Re: part two hintofawhisper September 13 2009, 01:47:18 UTC

Oh, I agree; I actually meant that when he loves someone, and is in an established relationship with them (an example being his marriage with the horrible woman, Sarah ;) ), he's quite open in showing that person how much he loves them. It's just when he's not exactly in a relationship and is unsure of the other person's feelings for him (like with Kate) that he can be quite guarded himself, in terms of displaying his affection. LOL, yes, anything compared to Kate is definitely open. Your perception of their relationship, and why things can be so hard between them, is spot-on; it makes me sad, actually, knowing this. As I know it does you, too ( ... )

Re: part two angela_weber September 13 2009, 02:56:58 UTC

Oh, yeah, definitely! I get all anal and start jumping ahead of people all the time, sorry! ;) It is very sad. This is so what fanfic is for: fangirl healing. ;) (P.S., because you mentioned her name and I can't help myself, Sarah is SATAN, as I know I've said before. 'Nuff said. ;))

Yeah, it's definitely a tricky thing to handle. I don't mind sex in fics if it's not gratuitous; I think if it makes sense for the story it's totally appropriate--but really graphic sex is not something I can get into or feel comfortable with writing or reading, either. (lol. The HP fandom is bonkers. Bestiality? Really? XD) No, rambling is totally fine with me, as you know! I totally get/agree with what you're saying ( ... )

Thread 5

missy_useless September 12 2009, 13:41:06 UTC

Oh. My. God. Please, please don't be worried about this fic. Please don't. This is absolutely beautiful and incredibly well written and quite possibly one of my favorite fics in the history of fanfiction, and probably my favorite Jack/Kate fic ever. So wonderful. Your Jack kills me (*DIES*) - and Kate: Kate is Kate and on the run and just perfect. I have told you a million times before that I adore your writing talent but guh, it's so true. I am so jealous. The imagery and the pace and the flow and ... Wow.

She leans into him and then away, his fingers peeling numbly from her skin like plastic. "Kate." Repetition is his only constant. She looks back at him, steam clouding his vision and, he hopes, her judgment. She almost smiles, pained, immovable. He shakes his head. She nods. The grief slaps him in the face, sharp, an oozing wound she won't, can't stitch up, not this time.I should quote this whole fic, seriously. The beginning and the ending (the ending! the last line! woah!) and everything in between. You know - this is almost ( ... )

angela_weber September 12 2009, 20:07:25 UTC

Wow--thank you SO much! But no way! I can't believe that this is a favorite. You are far, far too kind to me, as ever! I don't even know what to say. There is nothing to be jealous of, seriously. But it makes me so incredibly happy that you liked it, especially given the pairing! And there's no need to cry! It is happy--or as happy as these two will ever be, as you said. You're so amazingly kind to me. It really, really means the world. *hugs*

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angela_weber September 13 2009, 02:30:32 UTC

Thanks SO much! I'm really really glad that you liked it, and especially my Jack! Thank you so much for reading and commenting--it means a lot! :D