fic: Too Much (Diego Lugano/Diego Forlán, NC-17)

[txorakeriak]

Title: Too Much
Author: txorakeriak
Fandom: Football RPS, Uruguayan National Team
Pairing: Diego Lugano/Diego Forlán
Rating: NC-17
Disclaimer: I'm a lying bastard and made this all up. I don't claim to know any of the players I write about, they're most definitely not mine, and this very probably didn't happen. No payment involved, no offence intended. This

Comments

[freakmejc128]

Geez this is hot. I love that they like each other too much and that they're also just friends and can talk so casually as they rip each others' clothes off. Wonderful!

[txorakeriak]

I'm so glad you liked this! :D Thanks for the kind comment! :D

[zimena]

First of all: THANK YOU SO, SO MUCH!!!

Then, I'm very sorry it took me forever to comment on this. I've had so much of this comment in my head from the beginning, and with every reread I seem to discover new things about this fic. So, it's fantastic and wonderful and I'm still quite stunned at it. I'm so happy that you took the time to write them, and seeing how long this is was another amazing surprise even before I had read a single word. As someone who struggles to write long stories myself, it's a fabulous shock to get a fic of this length - it's so much more than I could ever dream of or expect!

Then - the fic itself! Bill, I love you so much for this (though, as you know, not only for this!), and I love this fic insanely much! You write them with such...feeling. It's so them and I can exactly see them like this. It's so interesting to see the development of their relationship here, and it's especially interesting to see Forlán's shame for having those dreams and thoughts. This part just makes me feel for him (duh, as if I didn

[txorakeriak]

So sorry for the late reply, but your comment totally floored me and I didn't know what to say - well, I still don't really know how to respond to such praise, and it's difficult to put my gratitude and relief into words, but I'm going to try

[kfunk22]

wow was this good! and hot. very hot. i'm not usually a big fan of nc-17, but lugano is so rarely featured in fic that i couldn't resist. i'm so glad i didn't.

i really liked the casual nature of their relationship, and how realistic the sex scenes were. and i'm quite taken with your writing style, which was very effective in portraying the slow build of their attraction for one another.

one minor quibble (and i never do this, but this just threw me off when reading this otherwise very polished piece), it should be "sought" not "seeked."

well done!

[txorakeriak]

Oh, thank you! :D Thanks for the kind comment as well as for giving this fic a chance despite the NC-17! I'm glad it didn't disappoint! :) I really appreciate what you said about my writing style because I'm not really too confident about my writing and always think my level is too low and I lack too much vocabulary and also that I'm repeating myself over and over again - I won't bore you with my insecurities, I just want you to know I appreciate your opinion! :)

And thanks for letting me know about that mistake! LOL! How stupid of me. XD Fixed it, of course!

[anonymous]

Ah very nice! I don't have any specific comments like everyone else but I'd like to say I've read a lot of your older fics and I've always liked your writing style! It's very detailed and beautiful. Thank you!

[txorakeriak]

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoy my fics! It's the best compliment! :)

[theosakansun]

Wow this is both gorgeous and hot :') It's cute too! :D

[txorakeriak]

Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it! :D