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twowritehands

When You Grow Up Your Heart Dies 20/20

May 24, 2012 20:29

Fandom: Inception x Dark!Breakfast Club

Pairing(s): Arthur/Eames, Cobb/Mal

Length: 65,016 words

Summary: They went into detention with nothing in common. They witnessed something frightening that may or may not have actually happened: a dead body and blood on the walls spelling 528491. Can a nerd, a jock, a criminal, a pampered prince, and basket case ( Read more... )

slash, hetero, "breakfast club", complete, inception, arthur/eames, inception_kink, au, fanfiction, cobb/mal

Comments 10

anonymous May 25 2012, 20:39:40 UTC

Aw, I'm a little bummed that it's done, but what a ride! (And what a word count!) Glad everything worked out for the best! And they stayed friends for ever and ever and Mal doesn't fall out of any hotels. Yep, that's totally what happens next!

Thanks for writing it! :D

twowritehands May 26 2012, 12:45:26 UTC

Thank YOU for sticking with it for so long! Womping word count indeed, 65,016 or thereabouts. I'm pretty sure this is the longest fanfic I've ever written, and I almost gave up a few times, but thanks to you I saw it through to the end, learned a lot, and actually had fun, so thank you very much!

....now I just need to read over the whole thing o__O

anonymous May 28 2012, 15:18:07 UTC

Whew, what a ride! Just read this in two sittings, and the only reason it wasn't one sitting was because it was 2 AM by chapter 15. ;p This was truly, truly fantastic.

twowritehands May 29 2012, 02:42:04 UTC

thanks anon! I have yet to read the whole thing so it's good to get feedback that assures it makes sense as a whole. lol

anonymous May 29 2012, 17:28:50 UTC

That was wonderful :) I'm sad that it's over, but it was an amazing ride. I can easily imagine the rest of it - finishing high school, settling in as a friend group, even afterwards. (Do Bobby and Arthur drop out of college to found Fischer-Morrow, like how Apple was founded?)

The only thing that confused me was when Bobby started being a suspect. I wonder if I missed a chapter because I didn't remember anyone saying the number was Bobby's until they started making plans to go to the ball.

I enjoyed the while thing so much! Thank you for writing it! And if you are ever moved to write a sequel (Breakfast Club: The college Years?) I will be right here to read it!

twowritehands June 1 2012, 01:55:05 UTC

Thank you so much for reading! I actually do have fuzzy ideas of what happened to each of them in the college years...it might happen. Arthur and Bobby do start the company together, because that is just fun to think about :D

And you did skip a chapter but only because of ME! *facepalm* I didn't post a chapter, but I have it up now. It is the REAL chapter 8, and all the rest after that are one off, number wise. Sorry about that (and the really bad typos and tense shifts) it will all be fixed!

my_midevilmind June 13 2012, 23:01:39 UTC

I spent the whole afternoon reading all of this and I regret nothing. This was a pretty epic story and I really wish there was more.

I was thinking about who the murder was while reading this but never expected Rod to have an accomplice.

And I love Eames's parents. Wish we could've seen more of Arthur's parents though (but i guess that's the point lol)

totally thought Ari was gonna go for Saito though, but Robert's cool too. They're both so cute together.

and I love how they all made fun of Dom's talent though out this. that's weirdest and most hilariously embarrassing talent ever.

I thought I wasn't going to like it because of the dark part (it sounded totally random when I was reading the prompt)but I'm glad I clicked the link and read it.

twowritehands June 14 2012, 20:06:09 UTC

Wow thanks for reading and writing such a lovely review! (the longer the fic, the better a longer review is ( ... )

eva667 March 4 2013, 17:39:58 UTC

Hi, I had a crazy busy weekend and didn't get to finish the last ten chapters till today. I loved it ! It was so so good. The only thing I'm curious about is Mal's stepbrother. What happens to him now ? Does he get to come home, will he be charged with anything ?

twowritehands March 5 2013, 17:57:41 UTC

Hmm, good question! A loose end I have over looked! I haven't thought much about her stepbrother beyond his purposes of a redherring, but I suppose he pleads innocent to any kind of assessory to murder (I don't think he knew what Maurice was up to) and, considering the lengths her step father went to to make sure Browning kept an eye on her safety, Mal's uncle believes her from now on about his obsession with her.

So, happy ending for everybody :D Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts with me about it!